Template:Did you know nominations/Melisa Wallack

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The result was: promoted by Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:00, 20 October 2014 (UTC)

Melisa Wallack edit

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~~... that Melisa Wallack decided to pursue screenwriting after "meeting a lot of writers" when she moved to Los Angeles with her data discovery business?~~

Reviewed: Andrew Velazquez

5x expanded by 97198 (talk). Self nominated at 05:26, 13 September 2014 (UTC).

5x expansion verified. New enough, long enough, well referenced, no close paraphrasing seen. Hook ref verified and cited inline. QPQ done. I'm just wondering if turning the hook around would make it more hooky:
ALT1: ... that after moving to Los Angeles with her data discovery business, Melisa Wallack started "meeting a lot of writers" and decided to become a screenwriter herself? Yoninah (talk) 19:13, 18 October 2014 (UTC)

That reads really well. Thanks also for your improvements to the article! 97198 (talk) 01:01, 19 October 2014 (UTC)

Thanks. Since all I did was rearrange the words, I'm approving this hook. ALT1 good to go. Yoninah (talk) 08:50, 19 October 2014 (UTC)