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The result was: promoted by Carabinieri (talk) 00:25, 6 March 2013 (UTC).
Lynn D. Stewart edit
... that Lynn D. Stewart found early fame as an offensive guard playing for the University of Illinois "Fighting Illini" and later went on to co-found the Hooters Restaurant chain?
- Comment: New article about the founder of Hooters
Created/expanded by GenQuest (talk). Self nom at 07:33, 2 February 2013 (UTC)
Length and date verified. The article needs a copy edit, and one paragraph is not referenced. - PM800 (talk) 20:18, 2 February 2013 (UTC)
- Done per request. GenQuest "Talk to Me" 22:45, 2 February 2013 (UTC)
- The article still has grammar issues and wording that is not encyclopedic. - PM800 (talk) 01:28, 3 February 2013 (UTC)
- I don't see that anything has been done to address the grammar and encyclopedic issues. Perhaps a request to the Guild of Copy Editors could be made, if GenQuest can't identify the problematic spots? It's been three weeks since the above; some progress needs to be made before it becomes four weeks/one month. I'll ping GenQuest's talk page. BlueMoonset (talk) 20:24, 24 February 2013 (UTC)
I did a thorough copyedit, removed POV language, and formatted all the references. I added 3 "citation needed" tags which need to be taken care of. As I checked all the references, I did not find close paraphrasing issues. The article is new enough, long enough, and well-sourced. The hook, however, is not hooky. It could be revised this way:- ALT1: ... that Lynn D. Stewart, co-founder of Hooters restaurants, played offensive guard for the University of Illinois' Fighting Illini, which won the 1964 Rose Bowl?
- If this fact can be sourced in the article, it would make a good hook for April Fools' Day:
- ALT2:
... that Lynn D. Stewart and five others opened the first Hooters restaurant on April Fools' Day because they were sure they would fail at the venture?Yoninah (talk) 23:44, 28 February 2013 (UTC)
- I will find the source for ALT 2 and in-line it at that point. Thanks for the copyedit, Yoninah, as my request to the GOCE was languishing. GenQuest "Talk to Me" 02:33, 1 March 2013 (UTC)
- Done. GenQuest "Talk to Me" 14:31, 1 March 2013 (UTC)
ALT2 hook ref verified. As I'm unable to approve my own hook, could another reviewer finish this up so we can get it into the queue for April Fools' Day? Thanks, Yoninah (talk) 17:31, 2 March 2013 (UTC)
