Template:Did you know nominations/Leighton Battery

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The result was: promoted by Yoninah (talk) 23:57, 26 May 2020 (UTC)

Leighton Battery

Created by Calistemon (talk). Self-nominated at 14:49, 25 April 2020 (UTC).

  • Comment: "discovered on a tip" does not make sense in U.S. English, as dump or rubbish dump are common usage. Could just delete those four words. David notMD (talk) 15:27, 26 April 2020 (UTC)
  • David notMD Would adding the word "rubbish" to make it discovered on a rubbish tip make it clear enough? Tip is what the source article uses, I checked to be sure. Calistemon (talk) 02:00, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
  • Yes, that would be enough. (I saw that the source used "tip," but as the hook is not quoting it, your discretion.) David notMD (talk) 02:06, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
  • No worries, I have amended ALT1 and proposed and ALT2 without the tip section. Calistemon (talk) 02:26, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
  • Article creation date versus filing date okay. Article length okay. Article sourcing and neutrality good and no evident signs of copyvio. QPQ done with diligence. The hooks are neutral and sourced. In terms of hook length, ALT0 is 197 characters, ALT1 is over at 211, ALT2 is 181. I'm of the school of thought that DYK hooks should be a little bit mysterious, so in terms of hook interest, unlike the previous commenter, I like using "tip", precisely because it is not known to American readers. So maybe ALT1 can be reworked to be within length (and shouldn't the ship names be italicized as well)? But if some formulation of ALT1 is out, then I think ALT0 is preferable to ALT2 in terms of interest. Wasted Time R (talk) 11:16, 13 May 2020 (UTC)
  • Wasted Time R Thank you for your review. I have placed the ship names in italics, as requested and re-worked ALT1 into ALT3, which should comply with length requirements. Is it suitable? Calistemon (talk) 13:14, 13 May 2020 (UTC)
  • Actually the recommended way to do the ship names in WP military articles is with a template, such as in this case {{HMAS}}, which for the example markup {{HMAS|Sydney|1912|6}} generates the HMAS part in regular font and just the name in italics, example HMAS Sydney. Otherwise ALT3 is okay with me. Wasted Time R (talk) 23:31, 13 May 2020 (UTC)
  • Tempplate used as recommended. Calistemon (talk) 04:33, 14 May 2020 (UTC)