Template:Did you know nominations/Korrie Layun Rampan
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The result was: promoted by Allen3 talk 19:10, 11 September 2015 (UTC)
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Korrie Layun Rampan edit
Korrie Layun Rampan
- ... that Korrie Layun Rampan (pictured), author of several hundred books, left an election commission to run in the election?
- Reviewed: Li Guangdi
Created by Crisco 1492 (talk). Self-nominated at 15:46, 18 August 2015 (UTC).
Long enough, new enough, neutral, QPQ done, no copyvio or text-stealing sins committed from the sources I could access/understand (approaching zero). Hook fact is cited. Image is free to use and visible at DYK size (I would use it; he's a happy-looking chap and has great taste in shirts). Bersertifikat intergalaksi, or ready to go at least. Belle (talk) 10:32, 20 August 2015 (UTC)
Comment: The end of the hook doesn't make sense unless you read it a few times. And the part about being an author doesn't really connect. If you're going for the image slot, how about something more hooky:- ALT1:
... that Indonesian novelist Korrie Layun Rampan (pictured), author of several hundred books, has a personal collection of approximately 25,000 volumes?Yoninah (talk) 19:48, 25 August 2015 (UTC)
- Personally, I found the original hook perfectly understandable and hookier, but smeh. Harrias talk 19:51, 25 August 2015 (UTC)
- I found the original hook perfectly understandable too. Maybe we could drop the author clause if you want a shorter, punchier hook. ALT1 is fine too, but not as hooky IM(never-knowingly humble)O. Crisco 1492, up to you. Belle (talk) 19:57, 25 August 2015 (UTC)
- Maybe if it said "left an election commission to run in an election" it would read better. Or maybe not. I'm just really confused by it. Yoninah (talk) 20:09, 25 August 2015 (UTC)
- "The" implies that it was the same election he was supervising. "An" could mean an election elsewhere. Hence why I chose "the". Not a fan of dropping the "author" clause, as he is ridiculously productive. At the book launch I attended, he claimed he had the manuscripts for fifty more books on his laptop waiting to be finalized and sent to the publishers. — Chris Woodrich (talk) 23:40, 25 August 2015 (UTC)
