Template:Did you know nominations/Kathleen N. Straus

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The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:47, 24 February 2017 (UTC)

Kathleen N. Straus edit

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... that Kathleen N. Straus, who first became involved with Michigan politics as a volunteer for Adlai Stevenson's 1952 presidential campaign, was a member of the Michigan State Board of Education until January 1, 2017? Source: "that was ... in 1952. We moved here in July. There was an election and ...I volunteered for Stevenson who was running for president at the time" http://media.wix.com/ugd/cb5b69_78160e7698b94223878a4ad5199de1e1.pdf Source2: "WHEREAS, Kathleen N. Straus was first elected to the State Board of Education in 1992, re-elected in 2000, and re-elected again in 2008, to fulfill three eight-year terms spanning January 1, 1993 to January 1, 2017" http://www.michigan.gov/documents/mde/Resolution_Kathleen_Straus_FINAL_546052_7.pdf
ALT1: ~~... that Kathleen N. Straus was re-elected to be a member of the Michigan State Board of Education until she was 93 years old?~~ Source: "Kathleen Straus retired...at the end of her three eight-year terms on the Michigan Board of Education...Despite Straus’ age (now 93)..." https://www.thejewishnews.com/2017/02/16/kathleen-straus-retires-wont-stop-fighting/; "WHEREAS, Kathleen N. Straus was first elected to the State Board of Education in 1992, re-elected in 2000, and re-elected again in 2008, to fulfill three eight-year terms spanning January 1, 1993 to January 1, 2017" http://www.michigan.gov/documents/mde/Resolution_Kathleen_Straus_FINAL_546052_7.pdf

Reviewed: I am exempt from the QPQ requirement because this is only my fourth DYN nomination

Created by EAWH (talk). Self-nominated at 17:34, 31 January 2017 (UTC).

Detailed bio, on good sources, no copyvio obvious. - I moved the detailed award section from the lead, - please consider to mentions two or three as a summary in the lead. You may want to place the refs to their first occurrence, or perhaps place them all in a references section, away from the prose. - I confess that the hook - correct as it all is - would not not make me want to find out more about her. Can you think of something more catchy? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 16:02, 20 February 2017 (UTC)

I have made the reference edits suggested by the reviewer and proposed an alternate hook.EAWH (talk) 16:22, 22 February 2017 (UTC)

You can just talk to me ;) - - Please no changes in the nomination, better place ALTs below (next time). I write how I understand it, and you tell me what you think of it:

ALT2: ~~... that Kathleen N. Straus served three eight-year terms on the Michigan State Board of Education, the last until age 93?~~ --Gerda Arendt (talk) 17:13, 22 February 2017 (UTC)

Thanks! I'm still pretty new at this. How about a very minor change to what you wrote:

ALT3: ... that Kathleen N. Straus served three eight-year terms on the Michigan State Board of Education, the last until she was age 93? -EAWH (talk) 17:50, 22 February 2017 (UTC)

ALT4: ... that Kathleen N. Straus served three consecutive 8-year terms on the Michigan State Board of Education, ending when she was age 93? —BlueMoonset (talk) 01:05, 23 February 2017 (UTC)

ALT5: ~~... that Kathleen N. Straus was elected to three consecutive 8-year terms on the Michigan State Board of Education, completing the final term when she was aged 93?~~ —EAWH (talk) 02:09, 23 February 2017 (UTC)

Thank you, both. I left two options, say that the terms were consecutive or not. I don't think it adds interest to know that but sometimes a longer hook is wanted for balance of sections. Not sure about 8 vs. eight in this case, --Gerda Arendt (talk) 10:34, 23 February 2017 (UTC)