- The following discussion is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by — Crisco 1492 (talk) 12:44, 20 January 2013 (UTC)
Harry Glicken edit
... that volcanologist Harry Glicken (pictured) survived the 1980 eruption of Mount St. Helens only to die at Mount Unzen in 1991?
- Comment: Not sure if survived is dishonest, alts welcome.
5x expanded by Ceranthor (talk). Self nom at 17:12, 30 December 2012 (UTC)
- His nationality is not identified anywhere in the article. We’re not told who Milton and Ida Glicken were or where lived. Stanford Uni suggests he was American, but lots of foreigners go there. Up till this point, he could be from one of many countries. He was hired by the United States Geological Survey, so we’re getting the sense he was an American by now. But the first and only place his nationality is explicitly stated is at the bottom, in the category American geologists.
- Otherwise, it’s good. Refs all check out. Length is good.
- As for the hook, I’d remove reference to Mt St Helens, because he was not there when it exploded and it's highly misleading to say he "survived". (On that basis, I survived the eruption of Vesuvius that buried Pompeii.) I'd suggest his death on Mt Unzen was horrible and traumatic enough all by itself to be worthy of a hook. Something like: The American volcanologist Harry Glicken was killed by pyroclastic flow while observing the eruption of Mount Unzen in Japan in 1991?. Best. -- Jack of Oz [Talk] 01:53, 14 January 2013 (UTC)
- That hook isn't nearly as interesting. Here's the rewritten version...
- ALT1:
...that volcanologist Harry Glicken (pictured) was scheduled to observe Mount St. Helens the day of its 1980 eruption, but was replaced by David A. Johnston because of a schedule conflict?
I also added his nationality to the article. ceranthor 23:08, 15 January 2013 (UTC)
- That's good. But the new hook omits any reference to his actual death on Mt Unzen, which is what makes his not being killed at Mt St Helens ironic (if that's the right word). How about:
- ALT2: ... that volcanologist Harry Glicken (pictured) was saved from the 1980 eruption of Mount St. Helens due to a scheduling conflict, only to die in the eruption of Mount Unzen in 1991? -- Jack of Oz [Talk] 23:31, 15 January 2013 (UTC)
- I tweaked it a little more. I think that's good. ceranthor 03:06, 16 January 2013 (UTC)
- Yep, I can live with that. Well done. -- Jack of Oz [Talk] 03:08, 16 January 2013 (UTC)
- I tweaked it a little more. I think that's good. ceranthor 03:06, 16 January 2013 (UTC)
- Any tick? — Crisco 1492 (talk) 07:21, 18 January 2013 (UTC)
