Template:Did you know nominations/Emerson Newton-John
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The result was: promoted by Rcsprinter (yak) 13:04, 5 June 2012 (UTC)
Emerson Newton-John edit
- ... that the open-wheel racing career of Emerson Newton-John was put on hold for over a decade by the September 11 attacks?
- Reviewed: Bird Neighbors
Created/expanded by Drdisque (talk), The Bushranger (talk). Nominated by The Bushranger (talk) at 16:22, 3 June 2012 (UTC)
Date, length, and hook verified. My only suggestion to the author(s) is to use something like WebCite to archive the online sources. – Maky « talk » 00:17, 4 June 2012 (UTC)
I have a problem with the hook's wording: his career was not put on hold for a full eleven years; his career was put on hold after September 11. In fact, according to what Newton-John says in the second (Insight) source, his final open-wheel race was September 10, 2001. Can the hook be revised to reflect this? Even "on hold for over ten years" or "over a decade" would do it. The third source, cited in the third paragraph, does not actually say eleven years, it says "nearly eleven years", which in that case seems to mean it was about ten and two-thirds. I would like to suggest that the first paragraph under racing career be made more than one sentence, and the date of his final race before September 11 be given for clarity. BlueMoonset (talk) 03:53, 4 June 2012 (UTC)
- Done and done. - The Bushranger One ping only 04:30, 4 June 2012 (UTC)
- Hook looks fine; changes are good, and I added a qualifier to the section's third paragraph so it longer says "eleven years" flat out. BlueMoonset (talk) 05:31, 4 June 2012 (UTC)
