- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:40, 19 July 2016 (UTC)
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Elsa Reger edit
- ... that Elsa Reger, who had first rejected Max Reger's courting, wrote her autobiography about her life with and for him?
- Reviewed: Abrothrix longipilis
Created by Gerda Arendt (talk). Self-nominated at 09:30, 12 July 2016 (UTC).
The article is long enough. It features inline citations. It's written from a neutral POV. However, there are not explicit citations that support the hook. In order to promote this article for DYK, please add citations after the information that says she rejected Reger's courting and that she wrote his autobiography. The wording of the hook as it stands is also not necessarily supported the article. I would avoid the "for him" tagged at the end. It can be ambiguous and isn't mentioned in the article. No image. QPQ done.Amgisseman(BYU) (talk) 22:36, 12 July 2016 (UTC)
- Quick answer (late here): It's not his biography, but HER autobiography. If it's not yet in the article, I will add it, and the other. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 22:50, 12 July 2016 (UTC)
- Thanks for adding in that citation. Sorry about messing up the pronouns. The article looks good now as far as citations go. I would still change the wording of the hook so the "for him" isn't ambiguous to the readers (although it is clear in the article that that is the title of the autobiography). The way the hook stands it just seems like that phrasing could apply to an autobiography for him or her life for him.Amgisseman(BYU) (talk) 17:18, 13 July 2016 (UTC)
- I don't know what to do to without making it complicated. Quotation marks would clarify, but there's nothing to quote if not the German title. Help? - I understand that a hook should raise curiosity, - a bit of ambiguity might help that purpose. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 21:12, 13 July 2016 (UTC)
ALT1: ... that Elsa Reger, who had first rejected Max Reger's courting, wrote her autobiography about her life with him?- Gerda Arendt What do you think about that hook? Amgisseman(BYU) (talk) 19:18, 14 July 2016 (UTC)
- How do I politely say that it misses the one thing that is special. Many a wife's autobiography might say that. Her life with him was just 14 years, her life for him (the legacy of his work) much longer, and much more influential for posterity. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 21:20, 14 July 2016 (UTC)
- It's your article, so it's fine if you don't like ALT1. I think the interesting part for me is that she rejected him the first time. If you like the phrasing about her life for him then I would include the translation of the title of the biography (see my proposed ALT2). That way it can be in the hook, while remaining clear as to what it refers to.Amgisseman(BYU) (talk) 22:24, 14 July 2016 (UTC)
ALT2: ... that Elsa Reger, who had first rejected Max Reger's courting, wrote her autobiography entitled Mein Leben mit und für Max Reger (My Life With and For Reger)?- Playing with the idea (the translation is no title, sentence case):
- ALT3: ... that Elsa Reger, who had first rejected Max Reger's courting, titled her autobiography Mein Leben mit und für Max Reger (My life with and for Max Reger)? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 22:33, 14 July 2016 (UTC)
- How do I politely say that it misses the one thing that is special. Many a wife's autobiography might say that. Her life with him was just 14 years, her life for him (the legacy of his work) much longer, and much more influential for posterity. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 21:20, 14 July 2016 (UTC)
Passing this off to another reviewer so they can approve the hook since I was involved in writing it. Amgisseman(BYU) (talk) 22:42, 14 July 2016 (UTC)
