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The result was: promoted by Allen3 talk 00:26, 6 February 2015 (UTC)

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Created by Cricketgirl (talk). Nominated by Gerda Arendt (talk) at 23:37, 25 January 2015 (UTC).

  • I will review this, back in a bit. Montanabw(talk) 05:29, 28 January 2015 (UTC)
  • Article is new enough, long enough, Google translate verifies the hook, no copyvio concerns, no images to check, neutral, QPQ done, we are almost there, but...

But:
The entire synopsis needs references, it is completely unsourced.
Hook is short enough, but a bit awkwardly phrased, can we trim and tighten it just a little? I can't recommend specific hook language as reviewer, but perhaps start by putting the name of the article first, then the author/composer, and leave the last section where it is, see what happens? Montanabw(talk) 05:38, 28 January 2015 (UTC)

But:
Synopses don't need refs.
You can reword hooks, just not add different facts.
I prefer the active voice. But for you:
ALT1: ... that both libretto and music of Bezauberndes Fräulein were written by Ralph Benatzky, based on the French farce La petite chocolatière? --Gerda Arendt (talk) 08:36, 28 January 2015 (UTC)
  • Meh, I don't like passive voice either. Literally try putting Bezauberndes Fräulein as the first word in the sentence and see how to pull the rest of it together. I can't find anything in the MOS that says you don't have to cite a synopsis, but I noticed that The Tempest is a GA with no refs for the plot synopsis, so I presume you are correct. However, for my future edification, can you point me to this guideline? Montanabw(talk) 22:26, 28 January 2015 (UTC)
Sorry, no, I don't know any guidelines, - I watch what people do. What can we do? It's translated from German (where is stable since 2009 at least), --Gerda Arendt (talk) 23:10, 28 January 2015 (UTC)
I asked: MOS:PLOT --Gerda Arendt (talk) 23:40, 28 January 2015 (UTC)
OK, that part is OK. Now if you can just tighten up that hook just a little bit, we'll be good to go... something like: Bezauberndes Fräulein, libretto and music...(I can't propose a hook or someone else will have to finish the DYK...) Montanabw(talk) 06:42, 30 January 2015 (UTC)
I would for an English title. For German (which might read like Chinese to some readers), I prefer to introduce that it is about something with music on a libretto, --Gerda Arendt (talk) 11:42, 30 January 2015 (UTC)
Approved with original hook. Composer first is more active voice than alt1 hook. Montanabw(talk) 23:44, 30 January 2015 (UTC)
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