Template:Did you know nominations/All Saints Episcopal Church (Chicago, Illinois)

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The result was: promoted by PumpkinSky talk 03:14, 6 December 2011 (UTC)

All Saints Episcopal Church (Chicago, Illinois)

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Photograph of All Saints Episcopal Church from its front, also capturing its spire.

Created/expanded by I Jethrobot (talk). Self nom at 10:45, 16 November 2011 (UTC)

  • There is a problem with the hook. It only appears in the WP:LEAD, which is suppose to be a summary of more detailed points made later in the main body. Nothing is suppose to appear in the LEAD that is not in the main body in greater detail.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 07:29, 20 November 2011 (UTC)
Noted, and I have made appropriate changes in the body of the article. I, Jethrobot drop me a line (note: not a bot!) 08:51, 20 November 2011 (UTC)
  • Sorry Tony, I am a little confused. The links for all the articles seem fine to me, and clicking on the article links brings you to the website of the periodical. Some of the articles are behind paywalls, but the full text of those articles is saved on the Church's website, which is why I put them there in addition to links to the paywall'd periodical website. There are also sources coming from the Church itself (e.g. information about its services), but this is not to establish notability. I'm not sure if either of these things address your concern, but otherwise, let me know in further detail about what I need to do. I, Jethrobot drop me a line (note: not a bot!) 01:31, 22 November 2011 (UTC)
  • Fix the links so that they don't redirect. I.e., use official names. Not The Chicago Tribune, just Chicago Tribune.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 22:08, 23 November 2011 (UTC)

Concerns about close paraphrasing. Example: "noting the economic disparities between those who frequent the All Saints food pantry events and the residents of Ravenswood" "noted the economic disparities between those who frequent the All Saints soup kitchen and the residents of the surrounding neighborhood". Nikkimaria (talk) 13:24, 5 December 2011 (UTC)

  • I've changed this line to "...noting that individuals attending the All Saints food pantry events and the residents of Ravenswood were from economically disparate backgrounds." I, Jethrobot drop me a line (note: not a bot!) 15:01, 5 December 2011 (UTC)