Talk:Wood/Water/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 18:12, 21 October 2020 (UTC)

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Starting on another one for you soon --K. Peake 18:12, 21 October 2020 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• Mid-to-late 2001 → 2001
• Separate studios in the infobox by using flatlist instead
• "on the record label Anti- on" → "by Anti- on"
• "of third studio album" → "of their third studio album,"
• "for the remainder of the year." → "for the remainder of 2000."
• Are you sure the track wasn't recorded with Robert Carranza?
• Target Milwaukee, Wisconsin to Milwaukee
• "Wood/Water moved away from" → "The album moved away from"
• "was met with a generally favorable response from" → "received generally favorable reviews from"
• "the band could promote the album," → "the band promoted it,"
• "embarked on a US tour," → "embarked on an accompanying US tour,"
• "was released as the lead single" → "was released as the album's lead single"
• "The band appeared on Late Night with Conan O'Brien before" → "The Promise Ring appeared on Late Night with Conan O'Brien in May 2002, before"
• "a US support slot followed" → "a US support slot for Jimmy Eat World followed"
• "The Promise Ring appeared on the" → "The band performed for the"

Background

• Retitle to Background and recording

Writing and Bohlen's illness

• "third studio album, Very Emergency, in" → "third studio album Very Emergency in"
• Wikilink record label
• "Very Emergency expanded the band's" → "The album expanded the band's"
• "worked on the" → "worked as part of the"
• "tired of playing what" → "were tired of playing what"
• "released the Electric Pink EP in" → "released their sixth EP Electric Pink in"
• "Although the Promise Ring was then" → "Although the band were then"
• "the tour now canceled," → "the tour having been canceled,"
• "supported Bad Religion," → "supported Bad Religion on tour,"
• "style to Nothing Feels Good (1997)." → "style to their second studio album Nothing Feels Good (1997) than Very Emergency."
• "which forced the Promise Ring" → "that forced the Promise Ring"
• "and unable to tour" → "and made them unable to tour"
• Mention what year they couldn't tour for the rest of
• "graphics company; Bohlen and" → "graphics company, while Bohlen and"
• "The band brought" → "The Promise Ring brought"

Pre-production and label change

• Target Milwaukee, Wisconsin to Milwaukee
• "which differed in style" → "that differed in style"
• "In May of that year," → "In May 2001,"
• "jamming in rehearsal," → "jamming when rehearsing,"
• "although initially writing material" → "although initially wrote material"
• "they re-evaluated and" → "the Promise Ring re-evaluated and"
• "with Jade Tree by March 2001," → "signed to Jade Tree by March 2001,"
• "later in the year." → "later that year."
• "They contacted the band's manager," → "The record label contacted the band's manager,"
• Are you sure "cold" is the correct word here?
• "with that label;" → "with the imprint;"
• "The label was" → "Anti- was"
• "wanted move away" → "wanted to move away"
• "the band and label" → "the band and Jade Tree"
• "less synonymous"," → "less synonymous,""
• "from the Jade Tree sound." → "from the record label's sound."
• "to license the band's releases" → "to license the Promise Ring's releases"
• "to license the Electric Pink EP to Epitaph" → "to license Electric Pink to Epitaph"
• "European release and to" → "European release, and to"
• "the Promise Ring was becoming" → "the Promise Ring were becoming"

Production

• "the sound they wanted." → "the sound they wanted to create."
• "whom Street produced." → "whom Street had produced for."
• "the band flew to" → "the Promise Ring flew to"
• "They were in" → "The band were in"
• "they decided to" → "the Promise Ring decided to"
• Remove brackets around in the UK
• "The song included" → "The song features"
• "the remainder of the" → "the remained of Wood/Water's"
• "the band had toured with Camden earlier in the year." → "the Promise Ring had toured with Camden earlier in 2001."
• "returned from vacation he said" → "returned from vacation, he said"
• "where they played him the songs'" → "playing him the songs'"
• "to the previous day's recordings." → "to the recordings from each previous day."
• "assisted by Jon Olliffe." → "with assistance from Jon Olliffe."
• "Street and the band ran" → "Street and the Promise Ring ran"
• "on it turned out to be enjoyable." → "on the song turned out to be enjoyable for them."
• "beginning in September" → "beginning in September 2001"
• "The sessions total cost was" → "The total cost for the sessions was"
• 200,000 → $200,000
• "of the band's" → "of the Promise Ring's"
• "at Jacobs except for" → "at Jacobs, except for"

Composition and lyrics

• "the sound of Wood/Water has been described as" → "Wood/Water has been described as"
• Target alternative pop to Alternative rock
• "from their older emo sound," → "from their old emo sound,"
• Wikilink acoustic guitars
• Target folk to Folk music
• "were also present." → "are also present."
• "was reminiscent of the works by" → "was described as reminiscent of the music by"
• "Wheat and the Delgados." → "Wheat, and the Delgados."
• "Its title is from" → "The title of Wood/Water comes from"
• "and its lyrics addressed" → "and lyrics on Wood/Water address"
• "were related to touring, especially touring for" → "are related to touring, especially the tours for"
• "which was compared to that in" → "that was compared to that on"
• "garage rock-pop song evoked" → "garage rock-pop song evokes"
• "keyboard ending recalled" → "keyboard ending recalls the sound of"
• "set the lyrical tone for the rest of the album." → "sets the lyrical tone for the rest of Wood/Water."
• "Street told the band to" → "During recording, Street told the Promise Ring to"
• Target croquet mallets to Croquet
• "showcasing Bohlen's storytelling" → "that showcases Bohlen's storytelling"
• [36][33][43] should be put in numerical order
• Wikilink synthesizers
• "resembles the band's earlier material" → "resembles their earlier material"
• [36][34][44] put in numerical order
• Target chorus to Refrain
• Wikilink drum machine
• "as the band shifts" → "as the Promise Ring shifts"
• "Reminiscent of 10cc, Bohlen wonders" → "The song is reminiscent of 10cc's style, with Bohlen wondering"
• "which the band had" → "that the band had"
• "despite listening to" → "despite listening to the Smiths' fourth studio album"
• "an ambient country song which" → "an ambient country song, which"
• "The folk rock "My Life Is at Home"" → "The folk rock track "My Life Is at Home""
• Where do any of the sources mention comparisons to the Beach Boys and Weezer?

I had accidentally copied the wrong URL; fixed with correct one that mentions the comparisons. Yeepsi (talk) 14:01, 22 October 2020 (UTC)

Release

• Retitle to Release and promotion
• "online on March 3." → "online on March 3 of that year."
• "The band played a" → "The Promise Ring played a"
• "on March 26 on a" → "on March 26, 2001 via a"
• Target 10" vinyl to Phonograph record
• "This version contains one bonus track," → "The version contains one bonus track," with the wikilink per MOS:LINK2SECT
• "the band made two acoustic" → "the Promise Ring delivered two acoustic"
• "in April and May, supported" → "in April and May of 2002, being supported"
• "Arni + Kinski (formerly of GusGus)." → "former GusGus members Arni + Kinski."
• "On May 24," → "On May 24 of that year,"
• "released on May 27." → "released on May 27, 2002."
• "released as a single on July 9;" → "released as the album's lead single on July 9 of that year;" with the wikilink
• "of "Stop Playing Guitar" and" → "of "Stop Playing Guitar" alongside"
• Target CD to Compact disc
• "featured edit and album versions" does it feature multiple edits or just one? either change to "featured edits" or "featured an edit"
• "The band again supported Jimmy Eat World for a" → "Jimmy Eat World were again supported by the Promise Ring for a"
• "in late July and early August." → "in late July and early August of 2002."
• "announced on October 14 that the band" → "announced on October 14, 2002 that they"

Reception

• Retitle to Critical reception
• "thoughtful musicality", and" → "thoughtful musicality," and"
• "wrote that the" → "said of the album that the"
• "disappeared", replaced by" → "disappeared", being replaced by"
• "songs" which have" → "songs," which have"
• "the album was a" → "the album is a"
• "music critic Adrien Begrand called" → "critic Adrien Begrand called"
• "hearing the band" → "hearing the Promise Ring"
• "slower track", and" → "slower track," and"
• "were a" → "are a"
• "which saw the band" → "that sees the Promise Ring"
• "made it sound more" → "make it sound more"
• "the Promise Ring; it wasn't a" → "the Promise Ring; he said the album wasn't a"
• Target hook to Hook (music)
• "However, the album" → "However, he opined that the album"
• ""admirable", "you" → ""admirable," DiCrescenzo explained that "you"
• Wikilink Sizzler

Track listing

• except "Say Goodbye Good" by → except "Say Goodbye Good", produced by

Personnel

• Target Quincy McCrary to Quetzal (band)
• Any specific order for the Production personnel?

I put them in the order as they appear in the booklet. Yeepsi (talk) 14:01, 22 October 2020 (UTC)

References

• Copyvio score looks good at 21.3%
• Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
• WP:OVERLINK of Anti- on ref 17
• Various publications calling the album pop: → Citations regarding publications calling the album pop: on ref 32
• Cite Pitchfork as work instead for ref 34
• WP:OVERLINK of The A.V. Club on ref 36
• WP:OVERLINK of NME on ref 40
• MOS:CAPS issues with ref 52; ANTI is the part with the issues here since it is not stylised like that, though MP3 is fine since it is supposed to be in that style of capitalisation
• Fix MOS:QWQ issues with refs 55 and 61
• Wikilink CMJ New Music Monthly under sources per MOS:LINK2SECT

External links

• Good

Final comments and verdict

•  On hold though do not feel afraid to reach out if you are somewhat confused about any of the requested changes; let's hope your response speed is on track with the previous rate though. --K. Peake 12:30, 22 October 2020 (UTC)

Done. Yeepsi (talk) 14:01, 22 October 2020 (UTC)

Yeepsi I did some brief copyediting where issues still needed fixing; a word of advice for next time would be to look through the requested changes yourself and double check that you have done them all before claiming to be done. ✓ Pass time has come now though, good job! --K. Peake 17:45, 22 October 2020 (UTC)