Talk:William McSherry/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 17:23, 21 May 2019 (UTC)

Comments

• "during the latter year, which was the last of his life." reads a little clumsily to me, any chance of an elegant re-phrase?
  • Rephrased. Ergo Sum 01:00, 22 May 2019 (UTC)
• "July 19, 1799 in " comma after 1799.
  • Done. Ergo Sum 01:00, 22 May 2019 (UTC)
• Don't think we need to link twin, it's common terminology for English readers.
  • Done. Ergo Sum 01:01, 22 May 2019 (UTC)
• "immigrated to the United States" maybe a ENGVAR thing but I would have thought that should be "emigrated to the United States"?
  • Quite right. Ergo Sum 01:01, 22 May 2019 (UTC)
• You use "United States" and "America" interchangeably, again possibly an ENGVAR/1780s thing, is that really ok?
  • Fixed. Ergo Sum 01:04, 22 May 2019 (UTC)
• "alongside six other young Jesuits" I count five listed.
  • Five it is. Ergo Sum 01:04, 22 May 2019 (UTC)
• " of the State of Maryland" not sure that S should be capitalised.
  • Uncapitalized and unliked "state of". Ergo Sum 01:04, 22 May 2019 (UTC)
• "October 27, 1836 on " comma after 1836.
  • Done. Ergo Sum 01:06, 22 May 2019 (UTC)
• Lead says he was prez from 1838, body says from December 1837...
  • That's right, I've fixed the years. Ergo Sum 01:06, 22 May 2019 (UTC)

The article is well written, well sourced, mainly compliant with MOS, comprehensive enough, and is very close to GA status. If we could just address the above issues, I'll be happy to pass the article. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:32, 21 May 2019 (UTC)

@The Rambling Man: Thank you for your review so far. I believe I've addressed all your comments. Ergo Sum 01:07, 22 May 2019 (UTC)

I'm happy with the updates and the article easily passes the GA criteria, so I'll pass it. Nice work. The Rambling Man (talk) 07:17, 23 May 2019 (UTC)

Thank you, The Rambling Man, for your review, as always. Ergo Sum 14:45, 23 May 2019 (UTC)

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