Talk:Wildflower (The Avalanches album)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 23:29, 27 November 2016 (UTC)

Lead

• studio album by Australian electronic music group → you can use "recorded by Australian" here for better fashion
• The album's production was stalled due → use "The record's" here for alternation
• Add year of release in brackets for King Kong'
• fashion to making a mixtape → fashion of making a mixtape
• Release year in brackets for "Frankie Sinatra"
• Link "Critics" to Music journalism
• The album was also a commercial success → The record also experienced commercial success (alternation + WP:FANCRUFT)
• it was a number-one album in the band's home country of Australia and a top-ten album in Scotland and the UK. → it reached number one in the band's native Australia and the top 10 in Scotland and the United Kingdom
• They plan to release these tracks "within a year" → use "songs" here for alternation
• provide a fresh start → omit "fresh" here as it's unencyclopedic

Infobox

• flawless ;)

Background

• was with Luke Steele in 2003 creating → comma before "creating"
• Release year of "Colours" in brackets
• considered for the album, but no estimated → state "record" here for alternation
• album's delay, however no new → , to ;
• providing a track name of "Frank Sinatra" → providing a track named "Frank Sinatra"
• musician David Berman reading a poem he composed → comma before "reading"
• combined into a new album. This was a similar process → combined into a new album, marking a similar process
• In regard to the group's second album → use "the band's" here for alternation
• February 2014: "Album sounds → : to ,

Production and composition

• because he was using Studio Vision → for his Studio Vision
• The group worked with multiple guest → state "The band" here for alternation
• and violinist Warren Ellis featured → ...was featured
• Release year for Madvillainy in brackets
• Release year for Uptown Saturday Night in brackets
• every track on the album → use "record" here for alternation
• was done by Pat Shannahan in Los Angeles who also cleared → comma before "who"
• The track would have not been → use "the song" here for alternation
• not be cleared.[8][18][3][25] → refs in numerical order
• release these tracks that were closely related to Wildflower → use "these recordings" here for alternation

Styles and themes

• Unlink Australia as it's a common term
• for the quote, fix - to –
• Add release year for There's a Riot Goin' On in brackets
• draw from the album's rebellious counter-culture nature, but their cover has a more psychedelic style → draw from the record's rebellious counter-culture nature, however approaching a more psychedelic style.

Release

• May, the group posted a video → use "the band" here for alternation
• Link "lead single" to its respective article here
• after the track debut → after the track's debut
• The album was promoted through a heavy advertising → use "It" here for alternation
• with TV → write out here to "television"

Reception

• Link "critics" to Music critics here, as well
• radio DJ → radio disc jockey
• foggy sound... reveals → foggy sound [...] reveals
• and ultimately calling the album "a faded → "calling" to "called"

Track listing

• Remove all album credit citations from "Contains samples of", and add the sentence "Credits adapted from the liner notes of Wildflower.[57]" atop the subtopic

Personnel

• Credits according to album notes:[57] → Credits adapted from the liner notes of Wildflower.[57]

Charts

• flawless ;)

Release history

• Unlink formats and labels
• Add references to the release on 1 July and 8 July

Other stuff

Copy-violation

• 47.4% is WAY too much! Please look for the first two sources at the top of the list and reduce the content from them in the article's body

Images and others

• Images and samples perfectly illustrate the article
• Sample seems stable ;)

Links

• No problems here!

References

• Please avoid WP:SHOUTING in several refs!!
• As far as I checked them, the references do cover the assertations made in this article.
• 1 dead link!! Please fix this!

Outcome

•  On hold for 7 days! Wow, BRILLIANT article; so few comments for such a long page ;) Cartoon network freak (talk) 11:38, 26 December 2016 (UTC)
  • @Cartoon network freak:: Thanks for your review, I addressed all your comments. My only concern is with the copy-vio. The reason for the high percentage is because the song titles are being flagged and each source had a long quote which was brought over. I'm not sure that calls for any editing? TarkusAB 18:43, 26 December 2016 (UTC)
    • @TarkusAB: Gladly passing! The article was GA even without my comments (It's ok with the COPYVIO thing now) ;) Best and congrats, Cartoon network freak (talk) 18:47, 26 December 2016 (UTC)

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