Talk:Why (Taeyeon song)/GA1

Latest comment: 7 years ago by Cartoon network freak in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 18:35, 30 December 2016 (UTC)Reply

Lead

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  • Add release year in brackets for her EP
  • I don't think that affect much the article's quality.
  • with elements from tropical house → with elements of tropical house
  •   Done
  • number six on Billboard → number six on the Billboard
  •   Done
  • Two music videos for the song were released → use "track" here for alternation
  • "track" is used when talking about a CD/physical release, therefore it is not applicable here
  • the first video was directed by → state "the first one" here for alternation
  •   Done
  • and was released simultaneously with the release of the song. → and premiered simultaneously with the single's release
  •   Done
  • The second one which is a dance version featuring Taeyeon performing the choreography to the song → The second visual, which is a dance version featuring Taeyeon performing choreography to the song,
  •   Done

Infobox

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  • flawless ;)

Background and release

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  • over 140,000 physical copies in South Korea → state "in that territory" here for alternation
  •   Done
  • number-one hit → number one hit
  • Not applicable because "number-one" is already an adjective, while "number one" is not
  • The lead single was "Starlight" → state "the lead one" here for alternation
  •   Done
  • single after "Starlight"; it was released → single after "Starlight", being made available (alternation)
  •   Done

Music and lyrics

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  • "woozy" tropical house beat and likened the song's → comma before "and"
  •   Done
  • Release year for "Middle" in brackets
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Reception

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  • were enthusiastic the track's musical styles → was enthusiastic towards the track's musical styles
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  • at number seven on the Gaon Digital Chart on the → at number seven on the aforementioned chart on the
  •   Done

Music videos

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  • There are two accompanying music videos → Two accompanying music videos were shot
  • Current sentence is alright I think
  • was released simultaneously with the release of the single → premiered simultaneously with the single's release (alternation)
  •   Done
  • as the protagonist who desire → as the protagonist who desires
  •   Done
  • expressed: "Taeyeon shows → : to ,
  • I don't get this point
  • choreography to the song → choreography created for the song
  •   Done

Promotion

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  • Subsequently following the release → comma after "Subsequently"
  •   Done
  • on a series of concert → on a series of concerts
  •   Done

Charts

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  • U.S. → US
  •   Done

Other stuff

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Copy-violation

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Images

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  • Sample seems stable ;)
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  •   Done

References

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  • As far as I checked them, the references do cover the assertions made in this article
  • No dead links! Good job!!

Outcome

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You're welcome! Gladly passing! Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 12:25, 1 January 2017 (UTC)Reply