Talk:Wasting Light/GA1

Latest comment: 12 years ago by Igordebraga in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Toa Nidhiki05 (talk · contribs) 23:01, 3 February 2012 (UTC)Reply

I will be reviewing this article. In cases where I am suggesting a change to a sentence, changes are marked in bold font. Toa Nidhiki05 23:01, 3 February 2012 (UTC)Reply

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
    Overall good prose, with only a few minor issues in the whole article:
  • I would change the portion "the Foo Fighters went to Grand Master Studios in Hollywood to record 14 compositions written during the tours, to possibly release a new album without much promotion and touring." to ""the Foo Fighters went to Grand Master Studios in Hollywood to record 14 compositions written during the tours so as to possibly release a new album without much promotion and touring." The only real change I would require is to remove the comma, but you can reconfigure however you like.
  • I would change "Grohl also used the Vultures tour" to "Grohl also used the tour with the Vultures", consistent with the above sentence. Not absolutely vital to change though.
  • Change "The recordings started with Grohl's rhythm guitar and Taylor Hawkins' drumming to provide the foundations and see if both can "lock in." to "The recordings started with Grohl's rhythm guitar and Taylor Hawkins' drumming, to provide the foundations and see if both could "lock in". I think this keeps the tense more consistent.
  • Change "After the guitar and drum track, Mendel would play his bassline," to "After the guitar and drum track, Mendel would play his basslines"; the use of singular for 'bassline' contradicts the plural use of 'where' later in the sentence.
  • The sentence portion "as Grohl felt Vig was "trying to make this into a radio single" when he wanted it "to sound really raw and primal"." might need to be changed, as the use of 'he' might confuse the reader as to whether it is referring to Vig or Grohl.
  • Change "Grohl declared that the while the demos that prompted him to say the album would be the heaviest yet were not used in the album, Vig took the declarations to heart," by removing the bolded 'the'. I think that is just a typo.
  • Alright, all clear there.
  • Going ahead and confirming that 1b is good.
  1. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
    All three of these are clear.
  2. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
    While 3b is fine, 3a is not. There is a major gap in coverage as there is no section for singles and no table listing them. This is a serious flaw, but can be easily corrected by adding about a paragraph of charting information for each major, international single (which would be Rope, Walk, and These Days). A suitable table would contain at least the major international charts, with perhaps the Rock Songs and UK Rock Chart added in.
Added a short sentence on Release and promotion (where Rope being the leadoff was already discussed) and transplanted the performance table on the discography page. igordebraga 00:55, 8 February 2012 (UTC)Reply
Alright, that should do - but if this is to get to FA status, it will certainly need expansion. For GA purposes, however, it is suitable
  1. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
    No issues.
  2. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
    No issues.
  3. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
    No issues.
  4. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  
    All issues are resolved, good job!