Talk:Washington, My Home/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MaranoFan (talk · contribs) 08:23, 21 March 2019 (UTC)

Hi, I'll be reviewing this article.--NØ 08:23, 21 March 2019 (UTC)

Top

• "(sometimes styled "Washington My Home")" -- The more commonly used form would be "stylized"
• The sentence after the first paragraph should be merged into it.

Predecessor

• " It was debuted by the University of Washington Glee Club on Friday, December 13, 1907" -- It being Friday seems like an irrelevant detail and not worth being mentioned.
• "'Washington Beloved' was declared the Washington state anthem on March 11, 1909" -- Add comma after "1909", and it may be helpful to link "state anthem" to National anthem
• "Concurrent resolutions in joint session being only ceremonial expressions of the will of the legislature" -- The word "being" should be replaced by "were" as it makes more grammatical sense.
• The word "however" is overused in this section, it could be removed from some of the sentences.

Composition and adoption

• "In 1959 "Washington, My Home" was declared the state song" -- Comma needed after "1959"
• "Other persons present as witnesses included" -- "Other people present as witnesses included"

1985 proposal

• No issues.

2011 proposal

• "In 2011 papers were filed" -- Missing comma after "2011"
• Sir Mix-a-Lot's name should be written like that, not as "Sir Mixalot"

Reception

• Add alt text to the image.

Legal status

• No issues.

Outcome

Once all of the concerns are addressed, I will promote the article.-NØ 08:23, 21 March 2019 (UTC)

Thanks kindly for this thorough review, MaranoFan. I believe all the issues have been update now but please let me know if I've missed anything. Chetsford (talk) 04:11, 24 March 2019 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.