Talk:Vermilion flycatcher/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk · contribs) 22:32, 16 April 2020 (UTC)

I will begin the review later. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 22:32, 16 April 2020 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

1. a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall: Pass

   Pass/Fail:

Review

Lead

• "Molt occurs in summer" is kind of awkward, maybe add a few more words there

Changed

Taxonomy and systematics

• What does mya mean? Should a note be added there to explain it?

I currently say "likely evolved around 1.15–million years ago (mya)", explaining the acronym. If you think that gets lost too easily, I could just spell out the whole "million years ago" for each mention, but it seems a bit wordy.

Ohh, no you're right. I just misread that. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 00:31, 18 April 2020 (UTC)

• "based on specimens brought back from Charles Darwin," wouldn't "by Charles Darwin" make more sense?

Right you are

Vocalizations

• Bird vocalization should be Wikilinked before the second paragraph since it is mentioned in the sentence "slower chatter call."

Done-zo

Breeding and nesting

• "Females often spend long times away from the nest, which enables females to lay their eggs in the nests of others." Females mentioned twice, could the second time be changed to "them"?

I've reworded it a little more to clarify the meaning

References

• Can you please make the dates consistent in the references (ie. Reference #1 says "26 November 2013" but others say "2020-04-14.")

I have gone through and cleaned the dates, and the sources in general

CaptainEek Minor changes needed but otherwise a very well written article. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 23:55, 17 April 2020 (UTC)

HickoryOughtShirt?4 Think I've addressed the issues you raised, thanks for such a speedy review. Lemme know if anything else needs changing. CaptainEek ^{Edits Ho Cap'n!}⚓ 00:27, 18 April 2020 (UTC)

CaptainEek Super! Thanks for the quick fixes. This is an easy pass. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 00:33, 18 April 2020 (UTC)