Talk:Typhoon Betty (1980)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: SounderBruce (talk · contribs) 04:26, 20 October 2017 (UTC)

Will review in the next few days. SounderBruce 04:26, 20 October 2017 (UTC)

Lead

• "October 27, 1980": double space and a missing comma after 1980, per MOS:YEAR.
  • Fixed. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 20:14, 21 October 2017 (UTC)
• The lead could be split into two paragraphs, since it's rather long.
  • Sure. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 20:14, 21 October 2017 (UTC)
• "Homes" vs "houses", need to choose one or the other
  • I don't see the problem, given they have the same meaning.
• "11v provinces"
  • That's what I get for adding non-breaking spaces last. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 20:14, 21 October 2017 (UTC)
  • Who declared these provinces as a disaster area?
    • I'll add this to the body. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 20:14, 21 October 2017 (UTC)

Meteorological history

• "upgraded [...] into": Should it be "to"?
  • Sure, changed. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 20:14, 21 October 2017 (UTC)
• "equal to low-end Category 2 status": "equivalent to a low-end Category 2 [storm]"
  • Hurricane, since the SSHS isn't officially used in this basin. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 20:14, 21 October 2017 (UTC)
• "(PAGASA) also monitored the storm" on November 1...is "began [monitoring]" missing here?
  • Re-worded. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 20:14, 21 October 2017 (UTC)
• Hurricane Hunter "fix": could a different term be used?
  • Any time the inner core of a hurricane is penetrated, it is refereed to as a "fix", but since you asked, I'll change it. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 20:14, 21 October 2017 (UTC)
• Lots of repeated use of "Betty"; some substitutions would be welcome.
  • Holy crap, I removed like three. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 20:14, 21 October 2017 (UTC)

Preparations and impact

• The first two sentences could be merged together.
  • Sure. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 20:14, 21 October 2017 (UTC)
• Is it known which airports were most affected by the Philippines Airline closure?
  • No. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 20:14, 21 October 2017 (UTC)
• "along low-lying suburbs": shouldn't it be "in"?
• "Even though" → "Although"
  • "Although" might be the most overused word in human history, but ok. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 20:14, 21 October 2017 (UTC)
• "30,000 [people left] homeless"?
  • Sure. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 20:14, 21 October 2017 (UTC)
• Inflation adjustments are needed for the figures listed in this section. Would prefer the local currency being used as well.
  • In general, most members of the wikiproject have been opposed to including inflation. Although I don't exactly agree, I generally haven't been including them for six years (except for certain templates). YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 20:14, 21 October 2017 (UTC)
• Who provided the C-47 plane and relief goods?
  • Idk. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 20:14, 21 October 2017 (UTC)
• Who declared these provinces as a disaster area?
  • Added. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 20:14, 21 October 2017 (UTC)
• 11 and 113 are better rendered as numerals, per WP:NUMNOTES.
  • But then I'm starting a sentence with a number. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 20:14, 21 October 2017 (UTC)

References

• Links missing from some refs, including first mention of JMA, Associated Press, NDCC, and US AID.
  • Great call. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 20:14, 21 October 2017 (UTC)
• Ref 9: Capitalization, link, and {{open access}} needed for Newspapers.com
  • Done. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 20:14, 21 October 2017 (UTC)

That's all for now. On hold until these issues are resolved. SounderBruce 02:22, 21 October 2017 (UTC)

Thanks for the review. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 20:14, 21 October 2017 (UTC)

All issues have been resolved. Passing and promoting. SounderBruce 06:15, 22 October 2017 (UTC)