Talk:Through the Wilderness/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 08:44, 29 December 2016 (UTC)

Lead

• November 27, 2007, by Los Angeles → no comma here

Infobox

• Alternative text for cover

Background and release

• Los Angeles based → Los Angeles-based
• Unlink Madonna
• the album was the third project → use "record" here for alternation
• delayed till → delayed until
• featuring the album artists → featuring the artists who delivered vocals for the album
• But he changed his mind → However, he changed his mind
• career till that point → career until that point
• through the wilderness..." → ... to [...]
• Similarly Lion of Panjshir → comma after "Similarly"
• covered "Cherish" for the album → state "for the record" here for alternation

Composition

• The synthpop influenced → The synthpop-influenced
• and Ariel Pink respectively → comma before "respectively"
• Guitar influenced versions → Guitar-influenced versions
• Crosby, Stills, Nash & Young influenced → associate with "-"

Critical reception

• adding that "Madonna → comma after "that"
• Unlink "tribute album" here
• However he added that few → However, he confessed that few
• "in patches" the album holds up → "the record" for alternation
• However he still found that → comma after "However"
• as two highlights describing them → comma before "describing"

Track listing

• Unlink here

Personnel

• Credits and personnel adapted → Remove "and personnel" here

Other stuff

Copy-violation

• 49.2% is too much!

Images

• Article is perfectly illustrated by images!

Links

• No problems here!

References

• As far as I checked them, the references do cover the assertations made in this article
• 1 link is dead + is mentioned twice in the article! Please fix!

Outcome

•  On hold for 7 days! Good job! Cartoon network freak (talk) 16:30, 30 December 2016 (UTC)
  • @Cartoon network freak: all done now. REgarding the copyvio, if you check that link it is for the credits and personnel section, which was copied from AllMusic and is attributed as such. It is not from any prose copy. Not sure what to do in this case as it seems a plausible percentage. —IB ^{[ Poke ]} 09:41, 2 January 2017 (UTC)
    • Gladly passing! Cartoon network freak (talk) 12:39, 2 January 2017 (UTC)

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