Talk:The Woman Next Door (novel)/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Reading Beans (talk · contribs) 01:49, 8 April 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: LEvalyn (talk · contribs) 18:30, 9 May 2024 (UTC)

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Comments

• Looking forward to starting in on this review! As I go, I'll fix minor things myself (and of course you can always revert/rewrite those changes, and make comments below with bigger concerns that I'll bounce back to you for edits. ~ L 🌸 (talk) 18:30, 9 May 2024 (UTC)
  • To comply with MOS:LEAD, the lead should serve as a summary of the article as a whole, but the majority of the article information is not mentioned there. This is often quick to fix, but you should talk a look at each of the article's sections and make sure their key points are summarized in the lead. ~ L 🌸 (talk) 18:44, 9 May 2024 (UTC)
  • In terms of prose and breadth, it feels very unbalanced to have a single sentence in the "themes" section. Personally, I'd use the reception section just for the awards, and use all the cited reviews to build out, instead, a more robust "themes" section. The two key themes I'm seeing, based on the quotes from the reviews, are post-Apartheid politics and female friendship. ~ L 🌸 (talk) 18:44, 9 May 2024 (UTC)
    • Actually, I've just completed a spot-check of sources, and did some initial prose edits myself based on what I found. I'd say now that the "themes" section should probably be one paragraph on apartheid and one paragraph on aging and/or grief. I also think there's enough in the sources for a short "style" section, which I got started. Let me know if you want any more advice on how to proceed in repurposing the reviews from "reception" to organize them into these sections. ~ L 🌸 (talk) 22:48, 10 May 2024 (UTC)

      @LEvalyn, thank you for your wonderful work! I don’t know how it happened but I’ve not been able to write constructive sentences for some days. I asked around, they said it’s “writer’s block” or something similar. Lol. I’ll reread the reviews now and see what I can flesh out. Best, Reading Beans 04:55, 11 May 2024 (UTC)

  • The development section is really great! A lot of book articles leave this information out so I wanted to specifically say that I appreciate the work here :) ~ L 🌸 (talk) 18:44, 9 May 2024 (UTC)
  • The plot reads a bit too much like a blurb rather than a summary, i.e., it leaves out the details of the main conflict and how it is resolved at the end (you may find WP:PLOTSUM helpful) ~ L 🌸 (talk) 18:44, 9 May 2024 (UTC)

     Done. Is this okay? Best, Reading Beans 14:02, 11 May 2024 (UTC)