Talk:The Life (Fifth Harmony song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 21:12, 3 September 2017 (UTC)

Lead

• Please use "second" instead of "sophomore"
• the album's first → the record's first (alternation)
• and was initially made available on streaming services such as Spotify and digital download sites like iTunes. → Too much info for the lead; remove
• with Hilbert handling → comma before "with"
• Musically, the song is an electronic dance song featuring elements of tropical house and Eurodance. → Musically, the recording is of the electronic dance genre, featuring...
• Link "Critical" to Music journalism
• and independence with the group → comma before "with"
• peaking at number 97 and 44 respectively → peaking at numbers 97 and 44, respectively
• chart complement → component chart

Infobox

• Flawless ;)

Background and release

• Unlink "Fifth Harmony"
• teased the song for the first time → teased "The Life" for the first time
• in which she revealed → in which she also revealed
• collaborators present in the album. → fcollaborators on the album
• behind the track saying that it → comma before "saying"
• She goes on to say that → She went on explaining
• Unlink "Tinashe" the second time
• and Lukas Hilbert with Hilbert → comma before "with"
• Serbian Ghenea → His name is "Serban"
• It was released → Say "The Life was released" here for alternation
• on March 24, 2016.[5] and serviced → on March 24, 2016,[5] and serviced
• the song was also made available on Google Play.[7] → you can remove that, as iTunes suffices

Composition

• of self-love and lifestyle with Peter Meister → comma before "with"
• Link "auto-tuned" to Auto-Tune
• Sample > of "The Life". An electronic dance song with → of "The Life", an electronic...

Critical reception

• You should add a topic sentence to the section, such as: Upon its release, "The Life" was met with positive reviews from [[Music journalism|music critics]]
• noting the song's use of "upbeat → noting its use of "upbeat (alternation)
• Dee Lockett thought the song → say "The Life" here for alternation
• at number one for their top 10 → at number one on their top 10
• calling the song an "urban bop → calling it...
• They also called it → They also labelled it (alternation)
• noted the song features a "increasingly frantic beat" → noted "The Life" features
• like Madison III → echoing the though of Madison III
• note similar "Danity Kane → noted similar...
• vibes" in the song, and highlighted the "production and execution" of the song: two times "song" in the same sentence :(
• He noted the more relaxing atmosphere in this song → He also noted the more relaxing atmosphere in the recording
• Simon Vozick-Levinson sais the song → "...says..."
• environment in the song → ...in "The Life" (alternation)
• not "have that “pass it off to the next singer” feel" → not that "have that 'pass it off to the next singer' feel"
• calling the song a "serious banger" → calling the recording...
• Image > Unlink "girl group" and remove comma

Credits and personnel

• Unlink "liner notes" + say "Credits adapted from the liner notes of 7/27."
• Say "composer" instead of "writer"

Charts

• Flawless ;)

Other stuff

Copy-violation

• 23.1% is acceptable

Media

• Images and sample seem stable ;)

References

• As far as I checked them, the references do cover the assertations made in this article
• Put italics around Spin in refs 2 and 3
• It's "Sputnikmusic" in ref 10
• Please link "Idolator" in ref 14
• It's Digital Spy in ref 16

Outcome

• There's a little work to de before I can pass this to GA status. I put this article  On hold for 7 days. Best of luck with editing!! Best regards, Cartoon network freak (talk) 13:09, 4 September 2017 (UTC)

Just finished including your suggestions into the article. Thank you for picking it up for a GA review. De88 (talk) 09:57, 9 September 2017 (UTC)

Gladly passing this! Congrats, Cartoon network freak (talk) 19:16, 9 September 2017 (UTC)

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