Talk:The Calusari/GA1

Latest comment: 11 years ago by TBrandley in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: TBrandley (talk · contribs) 16:44, 30 July 2012 (UTC)Reply

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  • "(stylized as "The Căluşari") is not mentioned/or expanded upon in the article ("Production"). Nor referenced
    Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)Reply
  • Make a note that it was US airing by saying it is an "American science fiction" or, after Fox network say United States "Fox network in the United States."
    Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)Reply
  • Only link Fox, not network
    Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)Reply
  • Episode can't really "premiered" how about "originally aired"
    Done (although, premiered is a verb...).--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)Reply
  • Link science fiction to science fiction on television. I think.
    Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)Reply
  • "It premiered on the Fox network on April 14, 1995. It was written by Sara B. Charno and directed by Michael Vejar. The episode is a "Monster-of-the-Week" story, unconnected to the series' wider mythology, or fictional history." wack of run-on perhaps re-word to: , which originally aired on the Fox network on April 14, 1995. Written by Sara B. Charno, the episode is a "Monster-of-the-Week" story, unconnected to the series' wider mythology, or fictional history. Directed by Michael Vejar, [etc.].
    I fail to see how my original sentence is a run-on (a run-on means one long, poorly written sentence). Since mine is several, and you're suggesting a cosmetic re-write, I don't feel that it is necessary.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)Reply
  • Link Nielsen household rating
    Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)Reply
  • "The Calusari" received mixed reviews from television critics, with inconsistencies in the plot being cited as the main detractors." Re-write to: "The Calusari" received mixed reviews, with critics citing inconsistencies in the plot as the main detractors."
    Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)Reply
Plot
Production
  • Add comma after Charno
    Commas should be used, in this case, two separate two sentences. Since these aren't two complete sentences, this shouldn't be there.
Broadcast and reception
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Great work! TBrandley 17:07, 30 July 2012 (UTC)Reply

All have been addressed or my reasoning put down. Thank you!--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:13, 30 July 2012 (UTC)Reply
No problem. I'll pass. Congrats! TBrandley 19:21, 30 July 2012 (UTC)Reply