Talk:The Boat Race 2000/GA1

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 17:58, 23 April 2014 (UTC)

Comments

• You need to fix the lead to encompass the fact that it's now the joint-tallest and was the youngest per some "modern" concept.
  • Already fixed age, height doing. Matty.007
• Should "TA Stallard" be "T.A. Stallard" per the other names?
  • Yes, missed that one.Matty.007
• "based on the opinion that getting a lead early in the race would give them an advantage" no reference for this opinion.
  • At the end of the paragraph. Repeated directly after sentence. Matty.007
• "Cambridge pressed and rewon their lead, and were a quarter of a length ahead after a favourable bend. Though level at Chiswick Steps, Oxford pushed ahead, gaining a five second lead by Barnes Bridge, and eight at the finish." no reference.
  • Again, end of para (now fixed). Matty.007
• "18 minutes, 4 seconds to Cambridge's 18 minutes and 12 seconds.[5]" would be cleaner to say "eight seconds ahead of Cambridge."
  • Doe. Matty.007
• Reaction section is incredibly light considering this race was a "shock triumph" for Oxford.
  • Not much given 14 years ago, but added the quote. Matty.007

More soon. The Rambling Man (talk) 18:54, 23 April 2014 (UTC)

Attepted fix of all. Thanks, Matty.007 19:01, 23 April 2014 (UTC)

Few more

• "The result was a "shock triumph", and Oxford lost in 2001" confused by the relevance of the latter portion of this sentence.
  • Removed, but I thought it showed the balance (i.e. that they had lost 7, won 1, lost another). Matty.007
• "joint tallest" I would imagine should be hyphenated, always worth checking with someone who knows what they're talking about mind you...
  • I think you're right, changed. Matty.007
• "1999 race by three-and-a-half lengths,[3]" probably a full stop needed here.
  • Changed. Matty.007
• "Oxford were considered the underdogs, and their victory came as a "shock triumph".[9]" this is in the crew section, you've given the game away before the race description section!
  • Changed. Matty.007
• Have you checked that no other crew members have Wikipedia articles?
  • I hadn't, but I googled all the names (not all at the same time!), and didn't find any more WP articles. Matty.007
• "that getting a lead" getting -> taking
  • Changed. Matty.007
• "8 seconds later" later -> behind.
  • Changed. Matty.007
• "ever modern winner" still uncertain what the definition of "modern" is here.
  • Changed to quotes, as not entirely sure myself! Matty.007

The Rambling Man (talk) 17:45, 29 April 2014 (UTC)

The Rambling Man: attempted fix of all. Thanks, Matty.007 18:43, 29 April 2014 (UTC)

Nearly there, just one query, please make sure your "works" and "publishers" are consistently and correctly formatted. The Rambling Man (talk) 20:06, 3 May 2014 (UTC)

Attempted fix. Thanks, Matty.007 17:34, 4 May 2014 (UTC)

Any reason why "The Independent Rowing News" is a publisher while "BBC Sport" is a work? What's your logic? The Rambling Man (talk) 18:16, 4 May 2014 (UTC)

ProveIt GT only has the publisher slot for magazines, but I have now changed it. Thanks, Matty.007 18:18, 4 May 2014 (UTC)

Why is one person cited inline? "Glassman 22[1]"? The Rambling Man (talk) 20:27, 8 May 2014 (UTC)

Referencing the table. Unless it should go elsewhere? Thanks, Matty.007 18:37, 9 May 2014 (UTC)

I usually introduce the table with some prose, or worst case add a "Source:[1]" style attribution below the table. The Rambling Man (talk) 18:38, 9 May 2014 (UTC)

Moved. In a better place now, or should it be somewhere else? Thanks, Matty.007 18:42, 9 May 2014 (UTC)

Looks good to me. One last check over before I promote. The Rambling Man (talk) 18:46, 9 May 2014 (UTC)