Talk:Sydney Gardens/GA1

Latest comment: 7 years ago by The Rambling Man in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 09:45, 16 August 2017 (UTC)Reply


  • "Bath Vauxhall Gardens" could be created as a redirect to this article, plus I'd expect to see alternate names in bold as well in the lead.
  • Please forgive my ignorance, but by "pleasure gardens (or Vauxhall) in the country" are you saying that Vauxhall means pleasure gardens? I don't seem to be able to find anything with a quick Google about that.
  • "Bath & North East Somerset Council" doesn't seem to use an ampersand.
  • "Kennet and Avon Canal " likewise.
  • "In 1908 the .." and "Since 2015 work..." I would prefer to see commas after the years here.
  • "in the 1790s opening in 1795 as" I'd definitely expect a comma after 1970s.
  • "It was funded by selling £100 shares.[6] " any idea how many?
  • "a maze or labyrinth" one or the other.
  • "A plan of Sydney Gardens, Bath as part of the plan" comma after Bath. Wow, am I comma-obsessed? I think you get my feeling on this by now so I won't mention it again, but all instances could be fixed if you agree.
  • "semi-circular Orchestra with a wide covered loggia " you link "maze" but not "Orchestra" (which is curiously capitalised) or "loggia"... Suggest it be t'other way round.
  • "In 1836 the Hotel was" not its formal name so no need to capitalise it.
  • "when the Empire Hotel was built instead" where was that built, not in Sydney Gardens by the look of it, worth noting.
  • "a grant, of £332,000, from " now, I see no need for commas to separate the grant amount here!
  • "The grant will be used to.." it looks like it was awarded January this year, is "will be used" still right?
  • I've not seen anything in local press or from the council to say work has been done so yes. (Likely to be completed in winter months when less tourists around).— Rod talk 11:34, 17 August 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • " for a larger grant" about ten times the size so worth noting.
  • "Sketch of the Fancy Fair at Sydney Gardens, Bath for " comma after Bath.
  • Also, needs a full stop after "Painted around 1836 by an unknown artist"
  • "The 12 metres (39 ft) high" use "adj=on" in the convert template to avoid the odd "metres ...high".
  • "a gardeners cottage" would that be "a gardener's cottage" or "a gardeners' cottage"?
  • "bargees below" barges?
  • Last two "paragraphs" are too short, and listed building is linked on its second use in that section.
  • Changed & two sentences merged

Interesting article, well written, a handful of trivial points raised above, so it's on hold so we can go through them. Cheers. The Rambling Man (talk) 10:11, 16 August 2017 (UTC)Reply

Thanks for your comments, I have tried to respond but will admit I have been accused of comma and apostrophe abuse in the past , so if you see any more please change or point them out.— Rod talk 11:34, 17 August 2017 (UTC)Reply
All good, thanks for addressing my pickiness, promoted. The Rambling Man (talk) 14:06, 17 August 2017 (UTC)Reply