Talk:Sweden during World War I/GA1
Latest comment: 4 years ago by Haukurth in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Haukurth (talk · contribs) 09:54, 10 September 2019 (UTC)
I'll take a look. Haukur (talk) 09:54, 10 September 2019 (UTC)
Lead edit
- I'd say the lead needs to be significantly expanded to cover the most important contents of the article (MOS:LEAD). Haukur (talk) 12:52, 10 September 2019 (UTC)
References edit
- In the Salmon citation, "page=Chapter 4e" is not ideal. We should have both the name of the chapter and the name of the book. Can you get the pdf here?[1] If not, I can send it to you. Haukur (talk) 12:52, 10 September 2019 (UTC)
The war-time iron-ore trade edit
- Here we have three paragraphs of information cited to an article published in 1915. We're taking Curtin completely at face value here. Is he an unbiased source and did he have access to accurate information? Is he used like this by modern historians? I'd be a lot more comfortable here with some additional sourcing. Haukur (talk) 09:46, 11 September 2019 (UTC)
The fall of Hjalmar Hammarskjöld edit
- Three paragraphs with just one citation. And that citation, to page 473 of Scott 1988, does not in fact contain all this information. Maybe the surrounding pages do but I don't have access to all of them at the moment. In any case, it would be good to have a separate citation at least after every paragraph. Haukur (talk) 09:54, 11 September 2019 (UTC)
Broadness edit
- My main concern here is that I think the article isn't broad enough—there are many aspects of the topic which it doesn't touch on at all. Comparing it with Qvarnström's article, our article does a decent job of covering military issues and foreign policy but it is missing coverage of various domestic consequences of the war—including riots because of food shortages, demands for social reform, and the rise of anti-war literature.[2] Haukur (talk) 10:40, 12 September 2019 (UTC)
Images edit
- The images seem all right. The one showing Hvalen was a bit confusing to me at first since it's not easy to make out the submarine at first glance. Haukur (talk) 12:38, 12 September 2019 (UTC)
Second pass edit
- Excellent work here, I think we're nearly done. Just a couple more issues to look into and maybe I'll do a touch more light copyediting. Haukur (talk) 14:31, 4 October 2019 (UTC)