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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 00:28, 19 May 2016 (UTC)Reply


Happy to review. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 00:28, 19 May 2016 (UTC)Reply

Fairly well-written, only a few comments: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 01:17, 19 May 2016 (UTC)Reply

  • You may wikilink "bowel cancer"
    • I have changed it to "colorectal", which is the title of the Wikipedia article. '''tAD''' (talk) 15:33, 19 May 2016 (UTC)Reply
  • In "Early life", perhaps add when the interview took place in the line In his final interview, to the Daily Mail...
  • In "Illness and activism",
  • The link for "spreading" is a duplicate link.
  • will climb Mount Kilimanjaro in her son's memory It would be better to say "plans to climb" if this is a goal of hers.
  • In "Documentary",
  • Just curious, I wonder why the inverted commas in the quotes should look different. I think you can use the same template.
  • Place some citations at the end of the first para, it looks unsourced just now.
  • with his best friends "close friends" would sound more proper
  • The documentary is currently in development and will be made into a feature-length film. Don't say "currently", say "as of 2016" (if this documentary is still under development).
  • In "Death and reaction"
  • You can place Chris' comment in a quote template
  • You can simply say "Manford" instead of his full name, now that you have introduced him.
  • On 21 May it was announced that a public vigil Announced by whom?
  • Wikilink BBC
  • In "Music"
  • You can simply say "bucket list", not "Bucket List"
  • A dablink or two need to be fixed. [1]
    •   Done The other highlighted dab is for the hatnote at the top '''tAD''' (talk) 15:36, 19 May 2016 (UTC)Reply

No copyvio detected, images are properly licensed. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 01:17, 19 May 2016 (UTC)Reply

Sainsf all queries have been responded to. '''tAD''' (talk) 15:36, 19 May 2016 (UTC)Reply

Thanks for the response. This can be promoted. Great article! Sainsf (talk · contribs) 17:23, 19 May 2016 (UTC)Reply

Burial - questionable statement (section Death and reaction)

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The paragraph mentioning his funeral states "He was buried the next day". However the BBC News release used as citation does not explicitly state when his burial took place. I therefore question whether the citation should be regarded as supporting the statement. I would be inclined to rephrase the sentence "He was privately buried later" to fit what the citation says, though "later" is an open-ended term.Cloptonson (talk) 06:47, 15 December 2022 (UTC)Reply