Talk:Stephen Sutton/GA1
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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 00:28, 19 May 2016 (UTC)
Happy to review. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 00:28, 19 May 2016 (UTC)
Fairly well-written, only a few comments: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 01:17, 19 May 2016 (UTC)
- You may wikilink "bowel cancer"
- In "Early life", perhaps add when the interview took place in the line In his final interview, to the Daily Mail...
- In "Illness and activism",
- In "Documentary",
- Just curious, I wonder why the inverted commas in the quotes should look different. I think you can use the same template.
- Place some citations at the end of the first para, it looks unsourced just now.
- with his best friends "close friends" would sound more proper
- The documentary is currently in development and will be made into a feature-length film. Don't say "currently", say "as of 2016" (if this documentary is still under development).
- In "Death and reaction"
- In "Music"
- You can simply say "bucket list", not "Bucket List"
- A dablink or two need to be fixed. [1]
No copyvio detected, images are properly licensed. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 01:17, 19 May 2016 (UTC)
Sainsf all queries have been responded to. '''tAD''' (talk) 15:36, 19 May 2016 (UTC)
Burial - questionable statement (section Death and reaction)
editThe paragraph mentioning his funeral states "He was buried the next day". However the BBC News release used as citation does not explicitly state when his burial took place. I therefore question whether the citation should be regarded as supporting the statement. I would be inclined to rephrase the sentence "He was privately buried later" to fit what the citation says, though "later" is an open-ended term.Cloptonson (talk) 06:47, 15 December 2022 (UTC)