Talk:Spastic hemiplegia

Latest comment: 11 years ago by Sportygeek in topic Praise/Corrections

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a. Good i. Good Intro, very descriptive and easy to understand for readers overall. ii. Throughout the Wikipedia page, it was easy for me to understand what this group was aiming to achieve in educating the public about this disorder. iii. I liked how there were many links into other descriptions so that readers may click on the link and learn more about other subjects. b. Needs Work i. Could link the description page for “action potentials” in introduction so readers can look up what it means if they do not understand what it is exactly. ii. Under complications, for the first sentence which reads “The muscle spasticity causes gait patterns to be awkward and jerky.” Can be a bit more elaborated on, maybe including an example, so that readers can fully understand what is trying to be said. iii. Maybe another section can be added into this overall such as adding a section on its genetics and how this disease is developed in the human body.

Sscho87 (talk) 03:39, 19 February 2012 (UTC)sscho87 02/18/2012Reply

Praise/Corrections

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The information is fairly solid, but could use pictures to give vitality to the page. More information and external links to this page would also be beneficial. (Sbrunner44 (talk) 03:46, 19 February 2012 (UTC)) This article has a good lead that gives a concise flow of information. The article to some extent gets everything set for the ensuing sections. The article is well structured. The article meets the criteria by providing references. Paliquito (talk) 05:01, 19 February 2012 (UTC)Reply

The information was well organized and easy to comprehend. Pictures were not present on this page and had only text. Pictures should be added to this page to help attract the audience visually. The subheadings are good but there is not a lot of information under the treatments and physical therapy section. I would like to learn more about the types of treatments and the epidemiology. For some reason under the “Causes” section there is extra space without text that should be fixed. Flashy1110 (talk) 00:59, 21 February 2012 (UTC)Reply

As currently written, very strong focus on congenital spastic hemiplegia (ie hemiplegic cerebral palsy). Many people with acquired hemiplegia (eg following a head injury) also have a primarily spastic form. Reading the hemiplegia, hemiparesis and spastic hemiplegia articles here - particularly given the top hat - you could easily be lead to mistakenly believe that all people with acquired hemiplegia have muscle weakness/paralysis as their main problem. I'm editing an article about a Paralympian who developed spastic hemiplegia after a car accident. Right now, there just isn't an appropriate article for me to link to. Sportygeek (talk) 04:20, 17 January 2013 (UTC)Reply