Talk:Something About the Night/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 19:37, 14 January 2018 (UTC)

I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 19:37, 14 January 2018 (UTC)

• Thank you for picking this up for review. I honestly did not anticipate that it would be picked up so quickly so I greatly appreciate it. Aoba47 (talk) 20:03, 14 January 2018 (UTC)

• Let's see how it goes as this subject is not one of my strengths as a reviewer.

• No DABs, external links OK
• Image appropriately licensed.
• Can you get a picture of the singer?

• Added. Aoba47 (talk) 02:45, 18 January 2018 (UTC)

• Link producer, studio album, single

• Linked. Aoba47 (talk) 02:45, 18 January 2018 (UTC)

• To promote the single, a music video was released on December 9, 2014. In the video, Michelle performs in a 1920s speakeasy. Combine these two sentences.

• Combined. Aoba47 (talk) 02:45, 18 January 2018 (UTC)

• Commentators noted that the singer was influenced by American singer Billie Holiday for her performance. Awkward. Suggest something like "the singer's performance was influenced by..."

• Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 02:45, 18 January 2018 (UTC)

• All the stuff about the production of the song seems rather redundant to the Credits and personnel section.

• It is rather standard practice to have information on the production/recording of the song in the prose of the article as well as a separate "Credits and personnel" section. Aoba47 (talk) 02:45, 18 January 2018 (UTC)

• it was put forth as a single following Delete everything before "following"

• Removed. Aoba47 (talk) 02:45, 18 January 2018 (UTC)

• the music from American musician This isn't wrong, but I think that "by" rather than "from" would read better.

• Agreed and revised. Aoba47 (talk) 02:45, 18 January 2018 (UTC)

• it was made available on the same day as the album delete all before "the"

• Good point. Removed. Aoba47 (talk) 02:45, 18 January 2018 (UTC)

• I think that the link for brown liquor is wrong as drinking it would probably kill you. Probably should be bourbon and other dark-colored liquors.

• Thank you for checking this part. I should have checked the link more carefully when adding it. Since the source is pretty nonspecific about the type of liquor, I have just removed the link. Let me know if that is okay. Aoba47 (talk) 02:45, 18 January 2018 (UTC)

• Delete the link to Kimberly Michelle Pate in the lede and explain that's the singer instead.

• Good point. Not sure how I missed that. Aoba47 (talk) 02:45, 18 January 2018 (UTC)

• Overlinked soul.

• Removed links. Aoba47 (talk) 02:45, 18 January 2018 (UTC)

@Sturmvogel 66: Thank you for the review! I believe that I have addressed everything. I apologize for a lot of the silly mistakes that I made on this one lol. Hope you are having a wonderful day and/or night! Aoba47 (talk) 02:45, 18 January 2018 (UTC)

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