Talk:Smells Like Nirvana/GA1

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GA Review

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Reviewer: Curly Turkey (talk · contribs) 04:53, 12 November 2012 (UTC)Reply

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

  1. Is it reasonably well written?
    A. Prose quality:  
  • ""Smells Like Nirvana" was met with critical praise and helped to re-energize Yankovic's career, and Cobain considered the parody as a sign that they had "made it" as a band."
    Split this in two: "...career. Cobain considered..."
  • "The song's video was later nominated"
    "later" is superfluous. Ditch it.
  • "another parody of a Michael Jackson song which had proven successful twice before"
    1. "another" with "before" is redundant
    2. without a comma after "which", it would seem to imply that Yankovic would re-parody a song he'd already done
    better: "a parody of a Michael Jackson song, which had proven successful twice before"
    or: "a parody of a Michael Jackson song, an appraoch [strategy, whatever] which had proven successful twice before"
  • "("Eat It" and "Fat")"
    I'd kick these out of the parentheses: "with "Eat It" and "Fat""
  • "Cobain agreed, though initially, he inquired if"
    Ditch the second comma
  • "drums as Dave Grohl, and all three wear clothing"
    Run-on sentence. Split after "Grohl".
  • "The charted on several Billboard charts"
    The what? Single? Album?
  • "most successful single since his 1984 single "Eat It""
    Reduncy. Try something like "most successful single since "Eat It" in 1984".
  • "Yankovic's largest comeback in his career"
    better: "the largest comeback in Yankovic's career"
  • "The song was well-received by the media at the time."
    "at the time" is redundant.
  • "Nirvana itself was also very pleased"
    "very" is unnecessary.
  • "Nirvana was initially asked to perform, but they decline."
    Do they habitually decline? ==> "declined"
  • "a similar looking shirt"
    ==> "similar-looking", or better, just "similar"
  • "Yankovic worried how the crowds in Seattle, where Nirvana emerged from, would react to the parody."
  • better: Yankovic worried how the crowds would react (to the parody in Seattle), where Nirvana emerged from [came from, originated].
  • You use an awful lot of semicolons that don't really serve any purpose. I'd at least cut down, but to be honest, I don't think a single one of them is necessary (most of them are outright incorrect).
  1. B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:  
  2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
    A. References to sources:  
    B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:  
    C. No original research:  
  3. Is it broad in its coverage?
    A. Major aspects:  
    I was surprised that its charting success was given for the UK and Australia, but not Canada. I seem to remember that Yankovic was particularly popular in Canada, even more than in the States. His only double-platinum record was earned in Canada. You might want to check that out.
    B. Focused:  
  4. Is it neutral?
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. Is it stable?
    No edit wars, etc:  
  6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
    A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:  
    It would be a good idea to put the Fair Use Rationale of File:Smells Like Nirvana (Sample).ogg into a
    B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:  
  7. Overall:
    Pass or Fail:  
I believe I've addressed all the issues. Thank you for the review.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:50, 13 November 2012 (UTC)Reply
I believe you have as well, and am passing the article. CüRlyTüRkeyTalkContribs 08:09, 13 November 2012 (UTC)Reply