Talk:Sleepless (comics)/GA1

Latest comment: 4 years ago by The Rambling Man in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 16:31, 22 September 2019 (UTC)Reply


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  • "eleven monthly issues published by Image Comics between December 2017 and January 2019" that's 13 months?
    • There was a gap between the first and second half of the story, so the schedule was monthly with a hiatus. This is detailed in the body, but I can't think of a clear way to summarize it in the lead. Any suggestions? Argento Surfer (talk) 20:04, 25 September 2019 (UTC)Reply
      • I took out the adjective, which seems like the most elegant solution. Argento Surfer (talk) 14:53, 1 October 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • Infobox says "Publication date: Nov 2017 – January 2018"...
  • Where is "Ongoing series" claim referenced? It had a limited run of just 11 issues... (also, prose says: "Although initially expected to run twelve issues", i.e. a limited run).
  • "with Alissa Sallah, who was their colorist and editor, and Deron Bennett, who was their letterer." -> "with colorist Alissa Sallah and letterer Deron Bennett".
  • Lead could use a little more in the final paragraph.
    • I added a couple sentences. Let me know if it still needs more. Argento Surfer (talk) 14:53, 1 October 2019 (UTC)Reply
  • "The initial concept for the story..." -> "The initial concept for Sleepless ...
  • " New York Comic Convention." we just call this New York Comic Con right?
  • "on March 2, 2017 at " comma after 2017.
  • No need to link common terms like "art studio".
  • Bitch Planet: Triple Feature - always a bit odd to part-link a title.
  • " the plot subverts traditional female roles in fantasy" how?
  • "lettering font" is "lettering" necessary here? A font is, after all, a series of letters in a particular style, right?
  • "2200" comma for thousand separator for consistency.
  • " on March 13, 2019 collected" comma after 2019.
  • Lady 'Poppy' Pyppenia vs Lady "Poppy" Pyppenia - be consistent.
  • " release[21] and throughout its run.[22]" just put the refs together, readers can wait to the end of the sentence, it's only another four words...
  • The first issue began in medias res[25] with... same.
  • "interconnected, or both.[28][8]" refs in order.
  • "compared it to Art Nouveau[19] or woodblock prints.[19]" unnecessary first ref.
  • "they complimented the artwork" do you mean complemented?
  • Why two "Comic ending" categories?
    • I believe the second was due to the infobox parameter, which has been revised. Argento Surfer (talk) 20:04, 25 September 2019 (UTC)Reply

That's all I have for now. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 13:17, 24 September 2019 (UTC)Reply

I've addressed all the easy ones. I will address the remaining two soon. Thanks for taking the time to look this over. Argento Surfer (talk) 20:04, 25 September 2019 (UTC)Reply
Argento Surfer no problem, ping me when you're ready for me to re-review. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 10:14, 27 September 2019 (UTC)Reply
@The Rambling Man: I've made adjustments to everything you've mentioned so far. Thanks for your patience. Argento Surfer (talk) 14:53, 1 October 2019 (UTC)Reply
Ok, cool, I'm satisfied with the article and am happy to promote. Good work. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 15:41, 1 October 2019 (UTC)Reply