Talk:Sleepless (comics)/GA1
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 16:31, 22 September 2019 (UTC)
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- "eleven monthly issues published by Image Comics between December 2017 and January 2019" that's 13 months?
- There was a gap between the first and second half of the story, so the schedule was monthly with a hiatus. This is detailed in the body, but I can't think of a clear way to summarize it in the lead. Any suggestions? Argento Surfer (talk) 20:04, 25 September 2019 (UTC)
- I took out the adjective, which seems like the most elegant solution. Argento Surfer (talk) 14:53, 1 October 2019 (UTC)
- There was a gap between the first and second half of the story, so the schedule was monthly with a hiatus. This is detailed in the body, but I can't think of a clear way to summarize it in the lead. Any suggestions? Argento Surfer (talk) 20:04, 25 September 2019 (UTC)
- Infobox says "Publication date: Nov 2017 – January 2018"...
- Where is "Ongoing series" claim referenced? It had a limited run of just 11 issues... (also, prose says: "Although initially expected to run twelve issues", i.e. a limited run).
- Updated to limited Argento Surfer (talk) 20:04, 25 September 2019 (UTC)
- "with Alissa Sallah, who was their colorist and editor, and Deron Bennett, who was their letterer." -> "with colorist Alissa Sallah and letterer Deron Bennett".
- revised Argento Surfer (talk) 20:04, 25 September 2019 (UTC)
- Lead could use a little more in the final paragraph.
- I added a couple sentences. Let me know if it still needs more. Argento Surfer (talk) 14:53, 1 October 2019 (UTC)
- "The initial concept for the story..." -> "The initial concept for Sleepless ...
- revised Argento Surfer (talk) 20:04, 25 September 2019 (UTC)
- " New York Comic Convention." we just call this New York Comic Con right?
- Indeed we do. Argento Surfer (talk) 20:04, 25 September 2019 (UTC)
- "on March 2, 2017 at " comma after 2017.
- No need to link common terms like "art studio".
- link removed Argento Surfer (talk) 20:04, 25 September 2019 (UTC)
- Bitch Planet: Triple Feature - always a bit odd to part-link a title.
- " the plot subverts traditional female roles in fantasy" how?
- clarified Argento Surfer (talk) 14:53, 1 October 2019 (UTC)
- "lettering font" is "lettering" necessary here? A font is, after all, a series of letters in a particular style, right?
- removed Argento Surfer (talk) 20:04, 25 September 2019 (UTC)
- "2200" comma for thousand separator for consistency.
- " on March 13, 2019 collected" comma after 2019.
- Lady 'Poppy' Pyppenia vs Lady "Poppy" Pyppenia - be consistent.
- revised Argento Surfer (talk) 20:04, 25 September 2019 (UTC)
- " release[21] and throughout its run.[22]" just put the refs together, readers can wait to the end of the sentence, it's only another four words...
- The first issue began in medias res[25] with... same.
- "interconnected, or both.[28][8]" refs in order.
- "compared it to Art Nouveau[19] or woodblock prints.[19]" unnecessary first ref.
- removed Argento Surfer (talk) 20:04, 25 September 2019 (UTC)
- "they complimented the artwork" do you mean complemented?
- maybe, yeah. Argento Surfer (talk) 20:04, 25 September 2019 (UTC)
- Why two "Comic ending" categories?
- I believe the second was due to the infobox parameter, which has been revised. Argento Surfer (talk) 20:04, 25 September 2019 (UTC)
That's all I have for now. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 13:17, 24 September 2019 (UTC)
- I've addressed all the easy ones. I will address the remaining two soon. Thanks for taking the time to look this over. Argento Surfer (talk) 20:04, 25 September 2019 (UTC)
- Argento Surfer no problem, ping me when you're ready for me to re-review. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 10:14, 27 September 2019 (UTC)
- @The Rambling Man: I've made adjustments to everything you've mentioned so far. Thanks for your patience. Argento Surfer (talk) 14:53, 1 October 2019 (UTC)
- Ok, cool, I'm satisfied with the article and am happy to promote. Good work. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 15:41, 1 October 2019 (UTC)
- @The Rambling Man: I've made adjustments to everything you've mentioned so far. Thanks for your patience. Argento Surfer (talk) 14:53, 1 October 2019 (UTC)
- Argento Surfer no problem, ping me when you're ready for me to re-review. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 10:14, 27 September 2019 (UTC)