Talk:Shame (Robbie Williams and Gary Barlow song)/GA1

GA Review

Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 02:16, 30 March 2016 (UTC)

Hello, I am Carbrera, and I'll be reviewing this article for possible good article submission.

Full review coming very soon. Carbrera (talk) 02:16, 30 March 2016 (UTC)

Infobox

• The single cover image needs an alt
• Redo the "recorded" section so it makes more sense; use Asking 4 It as an example please
  • With all due respect, that's a choice. I prefer how it is in "Shame".
    • Oh, I see. I was looking at this part exclusively through editing mode, so I overall assumed it would be a bulleted list. Yeah, this way's fine
• Remove the "certification" section since its empty

Lead

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• Remove the link to "lead single" per WP:OVERLINKING

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• Remove the hidden linking of "|single charts"; it's unnecessary
  • I think it's quite necessary because it links the UK Singles Chart

Development and release

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• The description for the image is a bit confusing to me; could you reword it?
• "that he is..." → "that he was..."
• Remove "; Williams didn't join them at the beginning."

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• "William's" → "Williams'"
  • The article is written in British English and Britons use ex. Williams's over Williams', but it's fixed now :)
• The second sentence uses a a lot of commas; could you reword this sentence as well?
  • I tried my best here.

Paragraph 3

• Insert a comma after "some countries"
• "apart of the title track,..." → "apart from the title track,..."

Composition and lyrical interpretation

• I would change the section title to "Composition and lyrics"
  • According to me it should be either 'Composition and lyrical interpretation' or 'Music and lyrics'; I usually prefer the first one
• The rest of this section is fantastic
  • Thank you!

Critical reception

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• You could add a link to contemporary music critics here
• Are there more reviews you could add to this section; it would benefit the article greatly?
  • Unfortunately I couldn't find more :/

Chart performance

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• Add a topic sentence discussing the track's commercial performance/reception please
  • I think we should leave the people to judge it, because everybody has diff perception of it honestly
• Other than that, also good work

Music video

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• Can you add dates on when the video was shot? If applicable of course...
  • Done.
• Instead of the photo of the two actors, would one of the actual video be more beneficial?
  • I did have, but there isn't a clear scene that we can use honestly, so the photo got removed and I added pics of the actors
• The synopsis is good, but a bit long? Do you think it should be shortened a bit?
  • Tried to cut it a bit, I think it's fine now, no?

Live performances

• You use "Shame" a lot; remember, you can also use "the track", "the single", "the song", etc....
  • Done. Used only twice now.

End of GA Review:

A very strong article. Please look at my suggestions, consider them, and message me when you'd like me to take another look at it. Thanks. Carbrera (talk) 23:25, 1 April 2016 (UTC)

Carbrera Thanks for your review. All the queries are done now, the ones which are not, you have a response regarding them. ;) — Tom^(T2ME) 09:56, 2 April 2016 (UTC)

Tomica I'll pass it now. Thanks for your work on this article! Carbrera (talk) 14:02, 2 April 2016 (UTC)