Talk:Shah Abdul Latif Bhittai/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Simongraham (talk · contribs) 10:15, 4 July 2021 (UTC)

This looks an interesting article on a topic that has already been included in Did you know. The poetry examples also encourage further interest in the topic. I will start the review shortly. simongraham (talk) 10:15, 4 July 2021 (UTC)

Review

The article is clearly written and covers an interesting topic. It is stable, 80% of authorship is one user, AhmadLX. It is currently ranked a Start class article.

• Images are licensed to Creative Commons Attribution-ShareAlike 4.0 International (CC BY-SA 4.0).
• The lead mentions that Hala Haweli is near Hyderabad, Sindh while in the main text, it mentions Hala, Sindh. Is there a reason for the discrepancy?

Done. AhmadLX-(Wikiposta) 18:24, 11 July 2021 (UTC)

• Mention of Fatimah is made in the lead but not in the main text. Please add a referenced mention.

Done. AhmadLX-(Wikiposta) 18:24, 11 July 2021 (UTC)

• Please remove the unqualified word "famous" following MOS:WTW.

Done. AhmadLX-(Wikiposta) 18:24, 11 July 2021 (UTC)

• "At the age of around 20, his falling in love with Saida Begum, a daughter of an Arghun aristocrat of Kotri Mughal, Mirza Mughal Beg, landed Latif's family in trouble and had to return to Hala Hawel" Please check the grammar. I suggest "At the age of around 20, he fell in love with Saida Begum, a daughter of an Arghun aristocrat of Kotri Mughal, Mirza Mughal Beg, which landed Latif's family in trouble and caused them return to Hala Hawel."

Done. AhmadLX-(Wikiposta) 18:24, 11 July 2021 (UTC)

• "It was perhaps during these travels that his poetic nature came to the fore" Consider rewording as per WP:NPOV.

Attributed to the author of the cited source. AhmadLX-(Wikiposta) 18:24, 11 July 2021 (UTC)

• Suggest replacing "He has mentioned in his poems the places he visited" with "He mentions the places he visited in his poems".

Done. AhmadLX-(Wikiposta) 18:24, 11 July 2021 (UTC)

• "Rumi has expressed similar idea in his verses" et seq. Is this original research as per WP:ORIGINAL?

No, it is a sourced claim; please see [24] (Lashari & Awan 2014, p. 53).

• "During Latif's lifetime, Sindh transitioned from Delhi based Mughal rule to local Kalhora dynasty." Consider "During Latif's lifetime, Sindh transitioned from Delhi based Mughal rule to the local Kalhora dynasty."

Done. AhmadLX-(Wikiposta) 18:24, 11 July 2021 (UTC)

• "Latif's poetry is popular among the commons folk in Sindh, including both Muslims and Hindus." I suggest removing this statement as it is unqualified, vague and unreferenced. The term "commons folk" is also not standard English.

It is a sourced claim. I have changed it a bit. AhmadLX-(Wikiposta) 18:24, 11 July 2021 (UTC)

• "The Urs, annual commemorative death ceremony of his, commences every year on 14 Safar (2nd month of the Hijra calendar) and lasts for three days, featuring prayers, music, exhibitions, literary conferences, and horse races." I suggest replacing with. "The Urs, an annual commemoration of his death, occurs on 14 Safar, the second month of the Hijra calendar. The ceremony, which lasts for three days, features prayers, music, exhibitions, literary conferences, and horse races."

Done. AhmadLX-(Wikiposta) 18:24, 11 July 2021 (UTC)

• The list of major works in the infobox is not shared in the main text. I suggest adding a section in the main body called something relevant and providing a full list.

The only major work is his Risalo and it is mentioned in the text. The others were basically unsubstantiated claims, added in the earlier version of the article that I forgot to remove. Now done. AhmadLX-(Wikiposta) 18:24, 11 July 2021 (UTC)

• The link to Shackle, 2013, does not go to the article.

Done. AhmadLX-(Wikiposta) 18:24, 11 July 2021 (UTC)

@AhmadLX: Great work so far. Please ping me when you would like me to take another look. simongraham (talk) 14:57, 6 July 2021 (UTC)

@Simongraham: Thank you for the review. I have addressed the points above. Thanks. AhmadLX-(Wikiposta) 18:24, 11 July 2021 (UTC)

Excellent work. simongraham (talk) 18:30, 13 July 2021 (UTC)

Assessment

The six good article criteria:

1. It is reasonable well written

   the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct

   it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead, layout and word choice.

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable

   it contains a reference section, presented in accordance with the layout style guideline;

   all inline citations are from reliable sources;

   it contains no original research;

   it contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism.

3. It is broad in its coverage

   it addresses the main aspects of the topic;

   it stays ffocused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail.

4. It has a neutral point of view

   it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to different points of view.

5. It is stable

   it does not change significantly from day to day because of any ongoing edit war or content dispute.

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   images are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content;

   images are (relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.

Congratulations. This article meets the criteria to be a Good Article.

Pass/Fail: Pass simongraham (talk) 18:33, 13 July 2021 (UTC)

Thank you simongraham for the detailed review and passing. AhmadLX-(Wikiposta) 23:45, 13 July 2021 (UTC)

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