Talk:Sense and Antisense (Millennium)/GA1
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Reviewer: TBrandley (talk · contribs) 03:22, 30 August 2012 (UTC)
- Infobox: When writing dates, use the {{start date}} template, only for infoboxes, tables, stuff like that
- Infobox: Where is the production code referenced? There should be something at IGN or epguides, or at the very least, the DVD set
- Infobox: Where is the running time referenced? There should be something at the iTunes Store
- Infobox: Where are the guest actors referenced? Anything at Radio Times, etc.
- Infobox: Could you cut down the red links? They look weird. Lol.
- Looking into possibly creating John Peter Kousakis soon, Zinyk I believe is a reasonably seasoned stage actor and could also be created. GRAPPLE X 17:49, 3 September 2012 (UTC)
- Lede: Pretty sure that crime and thriller are overlinks, thus a violation of WP:OVERLINK
- Lede: "premiered" should be "originally aired"
- Lede: Only Fox should be linked, without network
- Lede: "some folk". Could you clarify?
- Lede: Add "The show centers on ... In this episode, ..." to second paragraph before plot summary to let viewers know.
- Lede: Summary seems a bit small
- Lede: The lede seems to be a little short, and may violate WP:LEDE. Nielsen rating, etc. Considering that, if nothing more can be added, perhaps merge into two paragraphs, because, right now, it seems short for three
- Lede: "has" is not needed before "received"
- Lede: "mixed responses" seems weird. How about: "mixed reviews"
- Lede: "in its initial broadcast" → "upon its initial broadcast"
- Lede: "in its initial broadcast" where? In Canada, UK, US, France, Germany? (For the record, I know it's the US, just to clarify with some that do not know)
- Plot: The paragraphs are really short detracting from the readability of it. Could you merge some paragraphs?
- Plot: "drug addict" a link?
- Linked to Substance dependence. GRAPPLE X 17:49, 3 September 2012 (UTC)
- Production: comma is missing after "' final episode"
- Production: Any image to add? Or something else in article.
- Broadcast and reception: Only Fox should be linked, without network
- Broadcast and reception: "Nielsen rating of 6.7 during its original broadcast". That makes me think that it earned a Nielsen rating when the episode was airing. Re-write.
- Broadcast and reception: "The episode received mixed reviews from critics" → "This episode generally received mixed reviews from critics"
- Broadcast and reception: C+ → "C+"
- Broadcast and reception: "VanDerWerff found the episode "entertaining". Due to the previous sentence, perhaps add "Despite this," to the beginning of it.
- Notes: 1997–1998 should be 1997–98, as per WP:YEAR
- Notes: Link 1997–1998 television season
- References: Ref. 1, 2, 3 - Link the television seasons, then remove the "19"'s from it, as per WP:YEAR. See above.
- References: Ref. 4 - I feel that citing/referencing the episode is original research
- Just a comment: All the episode's say who wrote/directed them, it's only a different medium. It's not original research, because I, for instance, could get a hold of the DVDs and verify who wrote/directed the episodes. It would be original research if the episode's didn't tell who wrote/directed them, and I added the info based on an email I had with the producer, or info I found from a fansite. My two cents.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:22, 1 September 2012 (UTC)
- Ditto; the episode is being cited for its credits. I could add a book source for this but I don't feel that there's anything interpretive about taking a work's credits at face value. GRAPPLE X 17:49, 3 September 2012 (UTC)
- References: Ref. 5 - Publish day?
- References: Ref. 8 - Double quotes (") should be single quotes ('), as per MOS:QUOTEMARKS and WP:MOSQUOTE. It is to avoid doubling.
- References: Ref. 10 - Remove "DVD Talk Review of the DVD Video" from title
- References: Red links
- External links: Or a lack of one. Perhaps add links from IMDb, or TV.com. This can prove that the article is brove in its coverage
- External links: Categories should be sorted in alphabetical order
Good work on this article. In good shape, I will be happy to pass once the above issues are addressed. TBrandley 00:30, 1 September 2012 (UTC)