Talk:Scott Laughton/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 18:57, 8 October 2020 (UTC)

Reviewing this for the GAN October 2020 Backlog Drive MWright96 (talk) 18:57, 8 October 2020 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Lead

• Wikilink junior hockey to the relevant article
  •  Done
• "Following his sophomore season in the OHL," - OHL needs to be spelt out in full and the acroynms in parentheses
  •  Done

Early life

• "to play junior in the Ontario Hockey League (OHL)." - word-to-word of the nj.com that will need a little rewording to pass limited wording
  •  Done
• Wikilink lacrosse
  •  Done

Youth

• The second wikilink for Oakville, Ontario is not needed
  •  Done
• Goals and assists need to be wikilinked on the first mention for non-Ice hockey readers
  •  Done
• "Laughton also skated in two games with the St. Michael's Buzzers of the CCHL." - The full name of the CCML will need to be written out
  •  Done
• "As a result of his minor hockey play," - achievements
  •  Done
• "His play earned him a roster spot on the CHL/NHL Top Prospects Game[12]" - a comma is missing between "Game" and the citation
  •  Done
• Wikilink point to the relevant article on the first mention only
  •  Done

Professional

• "giving the Flyers five more games to decide whether he stays in the NHL or returns to major juniors." - remained in the NHL to returned
  •  Done
• "after failing to stick with the NHL club to start the season." - more formal; remain
  •  Done
• "for Team Canada at the 2013 World Junior Ice Hockey Championships." - Team Canada's U20 team
  •  Done
• "during the week of October 20." - phantomshockey.com source says the week ending October 19
  •  Done
• "and was expected to miss 3–4 weeks" - 3 to 4 weeks
  •  Done
• "the Flyers re-signed Laughton to a two-year, $1.925 million contract worth $962,500 annually." - the salary is not mentioned by the NHL source
  • Replaced ref
• Wikilink penalty killer to the relevant article
  •  Done
• Think the final paragraph can be split into two with the Laughton's activities in the Stanley Cup in its own paragraph
  •  Done
• "Laughton suffered a broken finger at the start of the 2019–20 season" - perhaps mention it was a broken finger on his right hand
  •  Done
• "A few games following his return," - how many games exactly?
  •  Done. Changed to December
• "The team rewarded his efforts by gifting him the 2020 Pelle Lindbergh Memorial Trophy as the team's most improved player." - repetition of "team"
  •  Done
• "When the NHL returned to play," - mention the season was delayed due to the COVID-19 pandemic as stated in The Hockey Writers
  •  Done
• Wikilink Seed to Seed (sports)
  •  Done
• "Laughton helped the team bounce back from a blown lead" - recover from a lost lead
  •  Done
• Wikilink shorthanded to the relevant article
  • Already WL for penalty killer
• Wikilink shutout
  •  Done

References

• Reference 6 is missing the author
  •  Done
• Reference 18 is missing The Canadian Press as the agency
  •  Done
• The hyphens in season in Reference 27 and the score in Reference 48 should be en dashes (–) per MOS:DASH
  •  Done
• The author of Reference 38 should be formatted as Friedman, Elliott and the wikilnk be in the authorlink= field
  •  Done
• Reference 46 is missing Associated Press as the agency
  •  Done
• Reference 47 is missing the author
  •  Done
• The first word in the title of Reference 51 should not be all in capital letters per MOS:ALLCAPS
  •  Done

Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 20:41, 8 October 2020 (UTC)

MWright96, done. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 01:21, 9 October 2020 (UTC)

• @HickoryOughtShirt?4: Now promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 07:53, 9 October 2020 (UTC)