Talk:RalliSport Challenge 2/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 02:39, 28 August 2023 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Just some copy changes. Next time, watch out for GameSpot versus Gamespy. Also needs one more non-free use rationale. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 02:49, 28 August 2023 (UTC)

Thank you for your time; I'll fix this up shortly. I should have done a copyedit prior to nomination, but this is all easily amended. Thanks again and I'll let you know when the article is updated. ＶＲＸＣＥＳ (talk) 03:14, 28 August 2023 (UTC)

I've addressed most of the points listed below. Let me know if I've missed anything. Great pick up with the camel case. ＶＲＸＣＥＳ (talk) 07:30, 28 August 2023 (UTC)

Copy changes

• RalliSport Challenge 2 features several racing modes from RalliSport Challenge, including 'Rally', a point-to-point solo race, 'Rallycross', a race against three opponents on a looped track, 'Ice Racing', and 'Hill Climb', a race to the top of an incline. With commas in the list entries, semicolons are needed. RalliSport Challenge 2 features several racing modes from RalliSport Challenge, including 'Rally', a point-to-point solo race; 'Rallycross', a race against three opponents on a looped track; 'Ice Racing'; and 'Hill Climb', a race to the top of an incline.
• The game also features 'Time Attack' races for the player to compete against recorded lap times, and 'Single Race' modes played solo or against the computer. Comma unneeded. User:Sammi Brie/Commas in sentences (CinS)
• RalliSport Challenge 2 features integration with Xbox Live, allowing for multiplayer races. Using Xbox Live or System Link, players can host or join a lobby to participate in races of up to sixteen players in contrast to the four available in local play. Online play is enhanced by the Xbox Sports Network, providing support for round robin and single elimination tournaments and seasons of races for players to compete as individuals or as part of a team. The Xbox Sports Network also features web integration, with players able to track statistics, message other players, participate in forums, and receive notifications and updates on the XSN website. In line with other online-enabled games on the Xbox, multiplayer on Xbox Live was available to players until 15 April 2010.
  • Last sentence needs a citation.
  • Tenses should be updated.
• Check for duplicate links.
• Make sure that "RalliSport" is written consistently in CamelCase; it's not right now.
• Exposure from the Rallisport Challenge 2 "the" unneeded, see above as well
• "benchmark product in virtually every area." Quoting a sentence fragment? Period outside quote: MOS:LOGICAL (Recurs)
• GameSpot stated that the road and track textures were "absolutely perfect", and that "every visual effect ... Unneeded comma (CinS)
• The game fared slightly better upon release in other markets, peaking at 10 on the US EB Games sales charts for all consoles in August 2004, and at 9 in Japan in October 2004. Remove second comma (CinS)

Spot checks

• 6: This is a French-language source. Google Translate says this passage should check out: Et malgré tout le bien que j’en pensais, je voulais ajouter énormément de choses. Je voulais que le moteur physique des voitures soit meilleur, qu’il soit plus réaliste, que les pistes soient plus longues afin de mieux refléter ce qu’est un vrai rallye, et bien sûr je voulais intégrer tout les modes Xbox Live. Y
• 13: I came up with the idea to create an artist moniker, Atlas Plug, and I made an album called 2 Days or Die. It was electronica that was perfectly suited for licensing in video games, T.V. and film. Before the album was even done, my publisher got a call from Microsoft to license four songs in a new game called Rallisport Challenge 2. That's where it all began. Y
• 27: Gamespy review. Four and a half stars with accurately reproduced quotes. Some of your mentions to the GameSpot review called Gamespy instead; fixed. Y
• 39: Eurogamer retrospective review, accurately restated. Y
• 40: Hyper review, accurately quoted. Y

Images

• Two non-free images are used, cover art and a screenshot. Add a non-free use rationale to the cover art. Encouragement: Add alt text.

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