Talk:RTV-A-2 Hiroc/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ealdgyth (talk · contribs) 14:04, 10 May 2017 (UTC)

I'll be reviewing this shortly. Ealdgyth - Talk 14:04, 10 May 2017 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

• Design:
  • Link and/or description for finspan?
  •  Done
  • I'm going to assume that "to reach 8,000 miles (13,000 km)" means "to reach 8,000 miles (13,000 km) above the earth" or "to reach 8,000 miles (13,000 km) orbit"? Probably not a bad idea to clarify for non-missile-geek readers
  •  Done
  • Link for pounds-force?
  •  Done
  • "The nose cone, which contains the ordnance was separated from the rocket" I believe you want "contained"
  •  Done
  • "The unique design of the Hiroc missiles would go on to inspire the Atlas rockets." - what was unique about them? I'm sure if I was a missile-geek I'd know, but ... I don't.
    • That was placed in proximity to the things unique to the Hiroc, gimbal engines, etc. I've made it more clear in the lede, and will work on the body when I get home (hard to type out a lot on phone). Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 18:06, 10 May 2017 (UTC)
• History:
  • Do we know why funding was canceled?
    • Because at that time Cruise missiles were more developed, so funding was given to them. I have found a source and added it.
• References:
  • Need a publisher for "A Photo History of Atlas Precursors" and it needs to be marked as a pdf (I wasn't exactly thrilled to discover I'd just downloaded something without any warning at all.)
    • I've manually added PDF to the title of the source, as Wikipedia usually adds it automatically, but got confused by the fact the link only downloads a PDF onto your computer, and doesn't link you to said PDF. My phone won't handle the link for some reason, so I'll have to add in the publisher when I get home. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 18:15, 10 May 2017 (UTC)  Done
• I randomly googled three phrases and only turned up Wikipedia mirrors. Earwig's tool shows no sign of copyright violation.

I've put the article on hold for seven days to allow folks to address the issues I've brought up. Feel free to contact me on my talk page, or here with any concerns, and let me know one of those places when the issues have been addressed. If I may suggest that you strike out, check mark, or otherwise mark the items I've detailed, that will make it possible for me to see what's been addressed, and you can keep track of what's been done and what still needs to be worked on. Ealdgyth - Talk 14:14, 10 May 2017 (UTC)s

• I have fixed what I can from my phone. I'll finish the edits when I get home. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 18:06, 10 May 2017 (UTC)
• @Ealdgyth: I believe I have fixed everything. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 19:00, 10 May 2017 (UTC)
  • Looks good. Passing this now. Ealdgyth - Talk 14:22, 12 May 2017 (UTC)