Talk:Pumpkin bomb/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 01:32, 26 May 2013 (UTC)

I'll get to this in a little bit.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 01:32, 26 May 2013 (UTC)

• Don't capitalize the 'P' in the caption
  • De-capped. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 27 May 2013 (UTC)
• Add this to the lede to better explain their purpose right away: The pumpkin bomb was a close but non-nuclear replication of the Fat Man plutonium bomb with the same ballistic and handling characteristics. That same phrase is duplicated twice in the main body so clean that up.
  • Done and done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 27 May 2013 (UTC)
• The main problem is in paragraphs two through four in the development section.
• Explain bomb shape or change it to just "bomb".
• Typo: demonstrated that the Fat man
  • Corrected. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 27 May 2013 (UTC)
• Typo: "on" 509th Composite Group in 20, 23, 26
  • Corrected. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 27 May 2013 (UTC)
• Use an endash for page ranges, not a hyphen.
  • Groan. Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 27 May 2013 (UTC)
• The infobox says 6,000lbs of filler, but the description para says 6,300lbs.
  • Corrected to 6,300 lbs, per source.
• You've got a fair number of overlinks.
  • It seems that the duplicate link checker is working again, so I have swept them up. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 27 May 2013 (UTC)
• No DABs and the pic is appropriately licensed.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:36, 27 May 2013 (UTC)
• All points addressed. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:30, 27 May 2013 (UTC)