Talk:Present Arms in Dub
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Hi DJTURNBULL
editHere are a few suggestions on improving your article:
- First, the article should start off with the title boldfaced in the first sentence, maybe like this:
Present Arms in Dub is an album released by UB40 in 1981 ...
- The introduction to the article should be clearly separated from the rest, and it should consist of just one or two sentences (this isn't a particularly long article, you should just summarize what it says and tell the biggest reason why the album is important).
- You might want to split the text into a couple of paragraphs/headings; it's a bit of a tough read as it stands. Maybe have one section dealing specifically with the musical aspects of the album ("swinging brass echoes...bass heavy drums"), and another dealing with its place in the history of reggae/Dub music (is Dub always capitalized like that?). The headings should be set off with double equal signs on both sides, like this:
- ==Musical analysis==
- ==Historical importance==
That makes the reading a bit easier, and differentiates the two subjects you're talking about here.
- Next, the article should definitely be written in third person. Instead of saying "This therefore takes you back to my first point...", you might say something like "The band did this in order to popularise ...".
- It's very important to maintain a neutral point of view. As an encyclopedia contributor, what you write should be simply facts, not your personal opinion. So the part about your favorite track doesn't belong in the article. You might move it to this Talk page, or perhaps to your User or User:Talk page.
- The link should be under a separate section called "External links", and it should be given a more formal-sounding title (maybe "Tracks on the album"
- Do you have any references for the statement about UB40 wanting to popularise reggae? Is it mentioned in music reviews of the album, perhaps? If you can find any of those references (which is a good idea, otherwise your work might be considered as original research, which doesn't really belong in an encyclopedia.
I hope that helps you. I would have edited the article myself, but I don't have the expertise and you obviously do. If you need more assistance, feel free to ask questions here on the talk page; I'll be watching it. Happy Wiki-ing :-) -- MatthewDBA 17:00, 17 January 2006 (UTC)
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editI removed most of this page despite agreeing with some of it; it was a very personal review, removed text follows:
Present Arms in Dub was the first album ever to reach the UK top 40 album charts, and proves the band were right in thinking Dub could become popular if given the same airplay as other forms of music. Right from the start, the swinging brass echoes and bass heavy drums of the title track, through to the Dub version of One in Ten will have you harking back to your student digs. Although UB40 were ahead of their time in early 80s mainstream Britain by releasing a Dub album devoid of any lyrics, they were merely doing what their heroes had been doing for the previous 15 years, but bringing it to a wider audience. This therefore takes you back to my first point about them wanting to popularise reggae / Dub. The very fact that so many other bands (Massive Attack / Morcheeba et al) continue to popularise this genre is thanks in no small part to UB40. As for my favourite track, as brilliant and live-sounding the brass may be in 'Present Arms in Dub', I'd have to plump for 'Neon Haze' which gives you Earl Falconer playing bass at his best. I'd recommend Present Arms in Dub as the ideal place to start when setting out on the Dub adventure.
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BetacommandBot (talk) 21:09, 26 November 2007 (UTC)
Fixed —Preceding unsigned comment added by 125.168.72.95 (talk) 00:45, 19 February 2010 (UTC)