Talk:Poco Pine/GA1

Latest comment: 13 years ago by Grondemar in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: Grondemar 04:43, 29 September 2010 (UTC)Reply

  Working I will attempt to complete this review within the next few days. Grondemar 04:43, 29 September 2010 (UTC)Reply

This article looks very good, even if it is a little short and could use a picture of two. In my mind it meets the good article criteria, except for a couple of prose concerns I'd like addressed before I pass the article:

  • "Curtner, who bought Pretty Rosalie also, had originally intended to purchase a daughter of Blackburn and a filly by Poco Bueno, but instead ended up purchasing something totally different. While still at the sale, Curtner was approached by two employees of Waggoner's, both informing Curtner that in their opinion, he'd bought the best mare in the sale. " I'm confused. Which horse did he end up buying? Poco Pine's mother? Perhaps this could be phrased differently.
  • I've attempted a rewrite of this, let me know if it still needs tweaking. Ealdgyth - Talk 15:15, 5 October 2010 (UTC)Reply
  • "One of the employees, Pine Johnson, Waggoner's trainer, also felt that Poco Pine was the best Poco Bueno colt he'd ever seen. Because of Johnson's praise for the colt, Curtner decided to register the foal as Poco Pine." I assume that the "Poco Pine" mentioned in the first sentence is the subject of the article, and not some other horse named Poco Pine that the subject of the article was named after? Assuming we're talking about one horse here, perhaps there's a way to phrase this where Poco Pine isn't called by that name before he is actually named "Poco Pine"?
  • Changed to "felt that the colt was the ..." instead.Ealdgyth - Talk 15:15, 5 October 2010 (UTC)Reply
  • Breeding career—Did you mean Poco Pine instead of Poco Bueno?
GA review (see here for criteria)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  
    This article will be   on hold for a minimum of seven days waiting for the above issues to be addressed.

Thank you. Grondemar 01:00, 1 October 2010 (UTC)Reply

I'm going to be on the road this weekend so it'll be Tuesday before I can get to these, but they shouldn't take long once I'm home. Ealdgyth - Talk 10:13, 1 October 2010 (UTC)Reply
OK, no problem, no rush. Grondemar 12:31, 1 October 2010 (UTC)Reply
Perfect! Thanks for the quick response; I will   pass this article as a Good Article. Congratulations! Grondemar 03:09, 6 October 2010 (UTC)Reply