Talk:Oubliette (The X-Files)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Lemonade51 (talk · contribs) 11:46, 18 June 2012 (UTC)

Lead

• "apparently the woman experiences exactly what the child is feeling.", I'm not sure about the use of 'apparently' here, perhaps you could rephrase it or just find a synonym (seemingly, at a glance, etc)
  • Rephrased. Glimmer721 ^talk 16:06, 18 June 2012 (UTC)

Plot

• No spaces should be present if the em dash is being used. Should be "Lucy's work clothes—O+ and B+," otherwise use the en dash.
  • Fixed. Glimmer721 ^talk 16:06, 18 June 2012 (UTC)
• "Wade, the photographer's assistant, had been fired the day of the shoot", missing a 'who' inbetween 'assistant' and 'had'?
  • Not sure about this one; basically, it is saying that "Wade had been fired the day of the shoot" as the important part of the sentence, because now he is their main suspect. So the "had been fired the day of the shoot" is part of the sentence, rather than a subordinate add-on. Glimmer721 ^talk 16:06, 18 June 2012 (UTC)

Production

• "The network requested that she be fifteen or sixteen and the episode would not rest on Amy's ordeal.", could do with a ref
  • It's after the following sentence. I think it's split between pages 120 and 121...the scans User:Gen. Quon sent me of the book have expired. I could ask him to check if you need it. Glimmer721 ^talk 16:06, 18 June 2012 (UTC)
    • It's on page 121, just checked.--Gen. Quon (talk) 17:15, 18 June 2012 (UTC)

Broadcast and reception

• which made it "nevertheless one of the series' boldest and greatest achievements". needs a ref as it is a direct quote.
  • Added. Glimmer721 ^talk 16:06, 18 June 2012 (UTC)

No concerns about imaging and sources. On hold. Lemonade51 (talk) 11:46, 18 June 2012 (UTC)

I believe I have fixed everything. Asking Gen. Quon about the page. Glimmer721 ^talk 16:06, 18 June 2012 (UTC)

And I just addressed the page issue. Should be good to!--Gen. Quon (talk) 17:16, 18 June 2012 (UTC)