Talk:Operation Nordseetour/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 21:22, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments

• Article title should italicise Nordseetour, suggest {{DISPLAYTITLE:Operation ''Noordseetour''}}.
  • I was wondering how to do that - thanks, and done Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
• "with heavy cruiser seeking" cruisers? or "with the heavy cruiser"?
  • 'The' - added Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
• "in France, Admiral" that link for France is far too much of an easter egg.
  • True, tweaked Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
• "when she attacked on the morning of 25 December." she attacked the following morning.
• "later on 25 December, and" later that day.
  • Done Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
• "arrived in Brest two days later" -> arrived in Brest on 27 December.
  • Done Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
• "The British Royal Navy strengthened" no need for British.
  • Removed Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
• WS5A or WS 5A?
  • WS 5A, fixed
• "The Kriegsmarine's (German Navy's) plans" -> "The plans of the Kriegsmarine (German Navy)"
  • Tweaked along those lines Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
• "Submarines and" U-Boats?
  • Same thing really, so I've deliberately not used 'U-boat's
• "The British Royal Navy anticipated" no need for British.
  • Done Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
• "in April 1939. In February 1940" repetitive. Perhaps "The following February"?
  • Oops, tweaked Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
• "fatally damaged" can fatally damage something that's not alive? Maybe critically damaged?
  • Done Nick-D (talk)
• "the Home Fleet during" what's that?
  • • Tweaked Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
• "German air force" you had Germany Navy so I assume this should be German Air Force
  • Yep, adjusted Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
• Kriegsmarine's -> Kriegsmarine's
  • Fixed, I think Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
• "German: "North Sea Tour" German is overlinked. Template should give you instruction on how to force it to delink.
  • Fixed Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
• "failed to understand that" interpret perhaps?
  • Tweaked Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
• Why link Malta but not Greenland?
  • Unlinked Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
• "The carriers" link.
  • Oops, I thought I already had linked aircraft carriers - fixed, and improved the wording Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
• "Hipper's secondary armament fired" overlinked.
  • Fixed Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
• "them.[31][20]" ref order.
  • Fixed Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
• "December Admiral Hipper's" comma after Dec.
  • Done Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
• Roskill ref needs en-dash in year range.
• And Steury (spaced en-dash).
• And Wragg.
  • All done Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)

That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 13:19, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

• @The Rambling Man: Thanks a lot for this review. Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)