Talk:Ohio National Organization for Women

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This is a great start. It's nicely organized and clear. Now I hope you'll fill it in. Maybe offer a little more history. Or maybe include an initiative the they're doing to improve women's lives. If there are similar organizations in other states you could include that too. Great start. Mcassell04 (talk) 19:47, 11 October 2015 (UTC)

This is a good start. I can clearly see what you are trying to do with it. I would suggest adding a history section in order to give context as well as adding to your current leads. --Jfords25 (talk) 01:36, 16 October 2015 (UTC)jfords25(talk) 15 October 2015

Independent sources

Hi Lrigby1. Taking a look at your draft, I think you're on your way to a useful article on the subject, but I'm worried that all the sources you've cited are directly connected to the subject. Wikipedia requires that any article have multiple, reliable sources written by third parties. In this case we'd be looking for local newspapers, mentions in magazines or books or even some websites, provided that they're not connected to the subject. If you can't find sources like that on this subject, it may not be appropriate for Wikipedia. Please let me know if you need a hand looking for sources or understanding Wikipedia's requirements for sourcing and article inclusion (it's a lot to take in, I know). Thanks. Adam (Wiki Ed) (talk) 17:47, 20 October 2015 (UTC)

Peer Review

I think that overall this is a good article. I presume that the information is limited and I encourage you to condense all of the sections and headers. For instance, it seems awkward to separate the "Priorities" headers into multiple categories due to the limits in information. Brevity is fine, but stretching the information across all of these headers makes it look awkward. Maybe condense all of the "Priorities" into one paragraph? AustinMcCrea (talk) 00:13, 11 November 2015 (UTC)

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Hi Lrigby1, You picked an interesting organization to write about. I think you are off to a great start. I would suggest linking to the Wiki page for NOW in the first section in case someone wants to read about it after reading your contribution to Ohio NOW. It is great that you included the goals, to answer the “why” questions. I am a little confused by the wording in the following text, “… ending sex discrimination/constitutional equality (Is it a goal to end constitutional equality?)….

The following website has good information about Ohio abortions laws and may give some information to expand on the information you have. http://statelaws.findlaw.com/ohio-law/ohio-abortion-laws.html Has the Center for Choice closed? I was trying to look up information about it and find a permanently closed clinic. http://www.toledoblade.com/State/2013/06/11/Kasich-won-t-say-if-he-d-veto-law-prohibiting-hospitals-from-engaging-in-transfer-agreements.html http://www.lifenews.com/2013/06/11/toledo-ohio-abortion-clinic-closes-after-breaking-health-safety-laws/

Is the following the national average? “On average, full-time working women earn just 78 cents for every dollar a man earns.” The following website provides information specific to Ohio which could support your article since it is specifically about Ohio NOW. Since Ohio now is also has goal to end racism, I would mention any inequalities concerning race and gender. http://www.cleveland.com/business/index.ssf/2014/04/women_in_ohio_only_made_769_ce.html

I would eliminate the word “organization” in the first sentence of the Steubenville section. The “O” in NOW stands for organization and the organization is referred to as Ohio NOW throughout the article. --Griffin710 (talk) 03:12, 13 November 2015 (UTC)