Talk:Nowadays Clancy Can't Even Sing/GA1
Latest comment: 6 years ago by Aoba47 in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 17:17, 17 January 2018 (UTC)
- Lead and infobox
- Please add ALT text for the infobox image.
- I am not sure if this part (, a somewhat disappointing showing for the band.) is necessary. Unless you have a source to support this, it reads more like an opinion. I think that the previous part on the chart placement by itself conveys that it was a rather disappointing showing without this.
- I would use Smith’s full name on the first mention (i.e. Ross “Clancy” Smith).
- You can refer to Springfield by his last name after you first introduce him. I notice in the lead that you say his full name a few times.
- Background and recording
- Could you add a more descriptive phrase in front of John Einarson other than “author” as it is a little vague?
- For this part (his apartment in New York), do you mean New York City?
- Release and reception
- For this part (while AllMusic declared), include the name of the person writing for AllMusic.
- Other renditions
- For this part (Highly orchestrated, Unterberger), the beginning phrase is connected with the subject, so it literally means that Unterberger is “highly orchestrated”. Revise the sentence to avoid this.
- Include the year in which Forever Changes was released.
- References
- Please revise the title of Reference 17 as it should not be in all caps.
- Final thoughts
- Great work with this article. I will pass this after my comments are addressed. Aoba47 (talk) 19:29, 17 January 2018 (UTC)
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- Aoba47 thank you for reviewing this. Before I get started, are you referring to Buffalo Springfield here: "You can refer to Springfield by his last name after you first introduce him"? Buffalo Springfield is the name of the band; I don't believe I can go by just "Springfield" because that isn't a commonly-used abbreviation of the group. Anyways, I'll get to work shortly. Thanks again!TheGracefulSlick (talk) 19:51, 17 January 2018 (UTC)
- Thank you for addressing this. I honestly have never heard of Buffalo Springfield before reading this article (I forget that they were band actually when writing that comment ><), so I agree with your point so you can refer to them by the full band name for the reasons stated above. Aoba47 (talk) 22:01, 17 January 2018 (UTC)
- Sometimes, what it is ain't exactly clear so no problem. Aoba47 I think I addressed everything but let me know if there is more I should do.TheGracefulSlick (talk) 11:12, 18 January 2018 (UTC)
- Verdict
- Thank you for addressing everything. I will ✓ Pass this. Aoba47 (talk) 16:17, 18 January 2018 (UTC)
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