Talk:No (Shakira song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 08:17, 24 December 2017 (UTC)

Lead

• A pop ballad, the song explores → replace "the song" with "it" to avoid repetation
• is best for the two of them → is best for both
• a "tender" ballad and a "classic heartbreak song" → as you paraphrase here, you need the reference these claims here as well
• It also fared well → I would change "well" with "moderately", as no real big success was registered with this song

Infobox

• Image needs ALT
• Is the release date 2 July or 5 June?? Please create a "Release history" section where you add the correct release date with a source
• Genre should be only "Pop", as others are not sourced in the article's body

Background

• her first English-language album → no "-" here
• having co-written almost sixty songs → numbers above ten should not be written out
• first a Spanish-language album → a Spanish language album first
• has always been by idol → I think you want to say "my idol" here?

Composition and recording

• is best for the two of them → is best for both

Critical reception

• was a "seething, acoustic-guitar-based" in → was a "seething, acoustic-guitar-based" recording in
• "It's not hard to imagine → "it's not hard to imagine

Chart performance

• This section should be "Commercial performance"
• No flaws here ;)

Music video

• The accompanying music video → An accompanying music video (don't start abruptly)
• with Shakira in many of her music videos → with Shakira for various other projects
• whilst it was edited by → and edited by
• falls off the track and into water beneath → no "and" here
• Throughout the video → replace "video" with "clip" to avoid repeating yourself
• seemingly as a metaphor for finding the strength to fly on her own → Remove this. I don't see any critic saying this, and thus it is your own opinion.
• does not go through with it and walks away → fails and walks away

Live performances

• I will take another look on this section after you fix the heavy repetation of "performed"; use another expressions like "sang, made an appearance..."

Track listing and formats

• No need for "formats" in the title
• Is there a digital download out there? If no, then remove it from the infobox

Credits and personnel

• from the album's booklet: → from the liner notes of Fijación Oral, Vol. 1

Charts

• Flawless ;)

Release history

• Don't forget to create one!

Notes

• For both notes, please remove "In English translation" with "Translation in English"

References

• Avoid shouting in refs 13, 19, 22, 36 and 40

Other stuff

Copy-violation

• 32.9% is still ok!

Media

• Image seems stable

References

• As far as I checked them, the references do cover the assertations made in this article
• No dead links! Good job!

Outcome

• Little issues here and there, but overall, the article is in a good shape.  On hold for 7 days! Best; Cartoon network freak (talk) 09:22, 27 December 2017 (UTC)

 Done @Cartoon network freak: Alex ^talk 23:23, 28 December 2017 (UTC)

Passing this! Best regards, Cartoon network freak (talk) 09:07, 29 December 2017 (UTC)

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