Talk:Moshassuck Valley Railroad/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Premeditated Chaos (talk · contribs) 07:05, 1 September 2022 (UTC)

Dibs. ♠PMC♠ (talk) 07:05, 1 September 2022 (UTC)

Lead

• Embiggen lead please

  Embiggened. Trainsandotherthings (talk) 15:56, 4 September 2022 (UTC)

• Lead contains info about the subject that isn't in the article (shortline status, )

  Shortline status, while I thought was obvious from the line being 2 miles long, is now explicitly stated in the body. Trainsandotherthings (talk) 15:56, 4 September 2022 (UTC)

• Lead says it was built from 1876 to 1877, but the body says a train was first run in 1876 - seems confusing to me

  These actually don't contradict each other. A locomotive first ran on the line in December 1876, but it didn't open for service until January 1877. Trainsandotherthings (talk) 03:06, 4 September 2022 (UTC)

History

• "W. F. and Frederick Sayles" reads like a couple of dudes' names, but later context makes it clear it's a company. Can you clarify in-text earlier? (maybe "by the W. F. and Frederick Sayles company, founded by Frank and Frederick Sayles"?)

  Will look into this. The text there was added by an IP following a drive-by edit by another editor disputing the company's origin. It's late on the east coast so I will address this tomorrow. Trainsandotherthings (talk) 03:06, 4 September 2022 (UTC)

  Per this source, the brothers were the founders of the railroad. I have rewritten the founding section accordingly. Trainsandotherthings (talk) 16:22, 4 September 2022 (UTC)

• "Passenger service continued until 1921, when it was discontinued" - could be simplified to "Passenger service was discontinued in 1921."

  I've modified this to "Passenger service continued until 1921, when it was ended following increased competition from streetcars.". Trainsandotherthings (talk) 15:56, 4 September 2022 (UTC)

• This is me being biased against short subsections but I don't think "Expansion attempt" needs its own sub-subheading. Won't die on the hill if you insist on keeping it but I need to say it :P

  I think the subsection is necessary. Otherwise, the history section is out of chronological order and may confuse the reader. Trainsandotherthings (talk) 16:22, 4 September 2022 (UTC)

Minimal commentary this time around. It's a short one so didn't have too much to gripe about :) Sources are fine, images are either PD-old or user-generated. ♠PMC♠ (talk) 01:58, 4 September 2022 (UTC)

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