Talk:Moses Malone/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 20:06, 2 May 2018 (UTC)

Going to read through this article and will leave comments soon. MWright96 (talk) 20:06, 2 May 2018 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Lead

• "Malone began his pro career" - professional
  • Fixed. – Muboshgu (talk) 21:27, 7 May 2018 (UTC)

Early life

• "Mary kicked her husband out due to his alcohol use." - kicked out is informal
  • Does "Mary forced her husband to move out of their home" work better? – Muboshgu (talk) 21:27, 7 May 2018 (UTC)

Utah Stars

• Wikilink 1974–75 season to 1974–75 ABA season
  • Done – Muboshgu (talk) 21:27, 7 May 2018 (UTC)

Spirits of St. Louis

• Link 1975–76 season to 1975–76 ABA season
  • Done – Muboshgu (talk) 21:27, 7 May 2018 (UTC)

Buffalo Braves

• "had also acquired power forward Maurice Lucas in the draft and believed they had acquired two players" - reptition of acquired
  • Fixed – Muboshgu (talk) 21:27, 7 May 2018 (UTC)

Houston Rockets

• "The following season in 1980–81 season," - reword to In the following 1980–81 season,
  • Done – Muboshgu (talk) 21:35, 7 May 2018 (UTC)
• Be consitent in how career high is written as either hypenated or not
  • Hyphens removed – Muboshgu (talk) 21:35, 7 May 2018 (UTC)
• "Days later on February 11 against the Seattle SuperSonics, " - Nine days later,
  • Done – Muboshgu (talk) 21:35, 7 May 2018 (UTC)

Philadelphia 76ers

• The New York Times should be italized since it is a printed publication
  • Done – Muboshgu (talk) 21:35, 7 May 2018 (UTC)
• "As it turned out" - transpired
  • Changed – Muboshgu (talk) 21:35, 7 May 2018 (UTC)

Washington Bullets

• Wikilink double-double for non-basketball readers
  • Wikilinked – Muboshgu (talk) 21:35, 7 May 2018 (UTC)

Atlanta Hawks

• "had won at least 50 games the prior three season" - had won at least 50 games in the prior three seasons
  • Fixed – Muboshgu (talk) 21:35, 7 May 2018 (UTC)
• Add a link to Phoenix Suns
  • Added – Muboshgu (talk) 21:35, 7 May 2018 (UTC)

Milkawakee Suns

• "reportedly for a $1.6 million salary in the first season and a $2 million salary" - replaced the emboldened text to wage to avoid reptition
  • Changed it to "Malone was reported to earn $1.6 million in the first season and $2 million for the second season" instead – Muboshgu (talk) 21:35, 7 May 2018 (UTC)

Player profile

• "and five other times he finished in the top-3." - top three
  • Changed – Muboshgu (talk) 21:35, 7 May 2018 (UTC)

References

• References 1, 39, 81 needs the date it was published
• Reference 34 is missing the author who wrote the article and its publication date
• United Press International needs to be added in as the agency for Reference 47
• References 15, 19, 20, 30, 46, 49, 87 & 89 are missing Associated Press as the agency of their respective works
• Reference 76 needs archiving and the date it was published

The prose itself is overall good but some minor issues with it and the references will need addressing before it can have any chance of passing as a GA. MWright96 (talk) 18:55, 4 May 2018 (UTC)

Thanks for the review. I'll get on this in the next day or so. It's possible I may have time this afternoon but I'm not sure. – Muboshgu (talk) 19:01, 4 May 2018 (UTC)

Since all of the queries above have been addressed, this article can now be promoted to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 07:14, 8 May 2018 (UTC)