Talk:Montagu Toller/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: LunaEatsTuna (talk · contribs) 01:01, 15 February 2023 (UTC)

• I will get to this (hopefully) later today—UTC wise. ツLunaEatsTuna (💬)— 01:01, 15 February 2023 (UTC)
• All done! Please ping me once you have addressed my concerns below. Thanks, ツLunaEatsTuna (💬)— 16:16, 15 February 2023 (UTC)
  • @LunaEatsTuna: All done! Ping! Harrias ^{(he/him) • talk} 16:33, 16 February 2023 (UTC)
    • Nice work! Happy now to pass this article for GA status per your changes. Congrats! ツLunaEatsTuna (💬)— 17:19, 16 February 2023 (UTC)

Copyvio check

Earwig says good to go.

File

The image used is appropriate, of acceptable quality and copyright-free:

File:MH Toller.png: valid public domain rationale.

Prose

• Both counties mentioned are wikilinked in § Life but not in the infobox.
  • Linked. Harrias ^{(he/him) • talk} 10:00, 16 February 2023 (UTC)
• I am sure you have searched extensively, but are there any RS sources on who his mother was?
  • Sadly not. Based on Ancestry, I can tell you she was Mary, but even with that information, I haven't been able to find a RS to support it. Harrias ^{(he/him) • talk} 16:16, 16 February 2023 (UTC)
    • I see. Thanks for trying! ツLunaEatsTuna (💬)— 16:39, 16 February 2023 (UTC)
• I would wikilink Brighton as a good chunk of non-English readers are likely to not recognise it.
  • Linked. Harrias ^{(he/him) • talk} 10:00, 16 February 2023 (UTC)
• The sentence starting "He played second-class cricket" is on the longer side. I think "and during the 1895 season" could be split into its own sentence.
  • Split and trimmed. Harrias ^{(he/him) • talk} 10:00, 16 February 2023 (UTC)
    • Looks good.
• Add a citation to the efn note.
  • Any update?
    • @LunaEatsTuna: Sorry, I did independently remember that I'd missed this! Added now. Harrias ^{(he/him) • talk} 17:04, 16 February 2023 (UTC)
      • It happens! I happened to be online when you pinged me :)
• "By the end of the 1897 season Cricket" – I believe this needs a comma?
  • Added. Harrias ^{(he/him) • talk} 10:00, 16 February 2023 (UTC)

Refs

Passes spotcheck—no concerns with refs 2, 6, 7, 10 or 15. I have access to BNA. Formatting:

• The title of ref 9 is missing a space.
  • Added. Harrias ^{(he/him) • talk} 10:00, 16 February 2023 (UTC)

Other

Short desc, section formatting, external link and cats good.

• Recommend adding WP:ALT text to the image with the alt = parameter.
  • Added. Harrias ^{(he/him) • talk} 10:00, 16 February 2023 (UTC)
    • Nice work!

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.