Talk:Mint (Namie Amuro song)/GA1

Latest comment: 7 years ago by CaliforniaDreamsFan in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 03:07, 25 August 2016 (UTC)Reply


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  • If there's no other readily available cover out there, you can remove the caption
  • Scratch this ;)
  • I would state "singer" instead of "recording artist" since you already said "recorded"
  • "The track received attention in the Western world" --> This doesn't sound encyclopedic to me
  • "After the critical and commercial success of Amuro's twelfth studio album" --> This isn't sourced and likely could just be replaced with "After the release of Amuro's twelfth studio album" instead
  • "on the live releases.[3][4]" --> Maybe state them if possible
  • Is this television series actually called My Sick Wife in some regions or is this just a translation for sake of convenience?
  • "Musically, "Mint" is a" --> "Musically, it is a" (Less repetition)
  • "All three editions included the normal versions and instrumentals of "Mint" and the B-side track "Chit Chat".[8][13]" --> No source for a Digital EP here, or is is the same?
  • "A staff member at Tokyo Girls Update was positive towards he song, praising Amuro's vocal performance;" --> Not a complete sentence
  • "The song attracted attention in the Western world by" --> Same thoughts that I had earlier
  • "Digitally, "Mint" and "Chit Chat" was a success in Japan." --> "Digitally, both "Mint" and "Chit Chat" were successes in Japan."
  • Billboard --> Billboard (in first case only)
  • Link "Japan Singles Sales" to "Hot Singles Sales"
  • Link "Japan Radio Songs" to "Hot 100 Airplay (Radio Songs)"
  • "back up" --> "backup"
  • I fixed up the "Charts" section already
  • There is one dead link

Overall

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On hold to allow for changes. Take as long as you need. Good luck. :) Carbrera (talk) 17:43, 28 August 2016 (UTC)Reply

  Done all changes. Thank you for the review   @Carbrera:. CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk · contribs} 23:59, 30 August 2016 (UTC)Reply