Talk:Mary Docherty/GA1

Latest comment: 7 years ago by Coemgenus in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: Coemgenus (talk · contribs) 11:47, 5 April 2017 (UTC)Reply

  • I'll review this one over the next several days. --Coemgenus (talk) 11:47, 5 April 2017 (UTC)Reply

Checklist edit

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):   d (copyvio and plagiarism):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  

Comments edit

  • This is mostly fine, an excellent article. A few points below:
  • Thank you.
  • "In 1937 she volunteered to fight in the Spanish Civil War with the International Brigade; however, she was turned down, because she did not have medical experience." Did she volunteer as a nurse? It's not clear how medical experience has to do with fighting.
  • True, but I'm afraid that's a limitation of the source, which says the same thing in slightly different words. It doesn't say what role she volunteered for.
  • In the paragraph that begins "She remained a member of the Communist Party for 70 years..." you have a lot of "she"s, which gets repetative. Maybe use her name a few more times.
  • Switched a couple of uses
  • "Her trip to the Soviet Union led to several prospective employers rejecting her after her return." This sentence repeats what was just said a sentence earlier, doesn't it?
  • You're right. Removed the duplication.
  • Are any images available? You might be able to use a fair use image if no free ones exist. --Coemgenus (talk) 15:22, 6 April 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • I'll take a look...honestly, though, I don't remember seeing any when I wrote this.
  • @Coemgenus: I took a look, but I'm afraid I cannot find anything. There's photos of a few other Mary Dochertys out there, including that of a child criminal in the US...but none of her. Even the interview does not have a picture. And I think that's the lot. Vanamonde (talk) 17:20, 6 April 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • That all looks good. too bad about the image, but it can't be helped sometimes. Nice work! --Coemgenus (talk) 18:13, 6 April 2017 (UTC)Reply