Talk:Mark Cullen (English footballer)/GA1
Latest comment: 3 years ago by The Rambling Man in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 17:10, 9 March 2021 (UTC)
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- I always avoid single-sentence paragraphs as you have as the opening para of the lead.
- I've added another sentence.EchetusXe 01:11, 11 March 2021 (UTC)
- Professionalism in association football is a good link for professional in this context.
- "were relegated out of" normally just "from" rather than "out of".
- "free transfer" link.
- Link "relegated" (to Promotion and relegation).
- "from St James' Park at " the academy don't play there.
- Looks like this has been done.EchetusXe 01:11, 11 March 2021 (UTC)
- "Born in Ashington, Northumberland..." this para has seven sentences, six of which start with "He..." mix it up, merge a bit, and throw in the odd "Cullen" instead of he.
- the "Tigers" - avoid using nicknames unless you've introduced them properly. Applies to "Shakers" and "Hatters" etc.
- " 2–1 League Cup second " use the specific season League Cup article rather than the general one.
- "that manager Richie Barker left Gigg Lane." sacked or ..?
- "relegated into the" just relegated "to".
- "a free transfer" link here too.
- "stunning" said who?
- "perfect hat-trick" link.
- "transfer fee" link.
- "scored both goals" both of his side's goals.
- play-off -> link 2017 English Football League play-offs.
- "grade two tear" what's that?
- "longest serving player" longest-serving
- "He was a linked " no need for the a.
- " Newcastle United U21 " overlinked.
- Looks like this has been done.EchetusXe 01:11, 11 March 2021 (UTC)
- "over Colchester United" likewise.
- Looks like this has been done.EchetusXe 01:11, 11 March 2021 (UTC)
- Refs 34, 53 and 56 have spaced hyphen, should be spaced en-dash.
- Looks like this has been done.EchetusXe 01:11, 11 March 2021 (UTC)
- Ref 40 vs ref 41 BBC Sport formatting...
- Looks like this has been done.EchetusXe 01:11, 11 March 2021 (UTC)
- Ref 15 vs Ref 26 football club website formatting consistency.
- Looks like this has been done.EchetusXe 01:11, 11 March 2021 (UTC)
- Refs need checking from top to bottom for consistency.
- They look good now.--EchetusXe 01:11, 11 March 2021 (UTC)
That's it for now, on hold. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 17:02, 10 March 2021 (UTC)
- Okay I've actioned on those now. Thanks.EchetusXe 01:11, 11 March 2021 (UTC)
- You're still using nicknames without introducing them. Who knows what "Shakers" or "Bantams" means without saying what they mean? Personally I'd stick with the club names, this is, after all, an encyclopedia. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 13:42, 11 March 2021 (UTC)
- Okay I have removed the nicknames.--EchetusXe 21:58, 11 March 2021 (UTC)
- Cool, happy now so passing. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 07:56, 12 March 2021 (UTC)
- Okay I have removed the nicknames.--EchetusXe 21:58, 11 March 2021 (UTC)
- You're still using nicknames without introducing them. Who knows what "Shakers" or "Bantams" means without saying what they mean? Personally I'd stick with the club names, this is, after all, an encyclopedia. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 13:42, 11 March 2021 (UTC)